Blood On The Mirror

One of the first horror poems i have ever written. The poem tells of Xavier, a cannibalistic demon, intimidating and horrifying its prey before consuming it,

Blood on the Mirror..
How can't you hear her? 
Why does this sound always stay? 
Now that you see me 
You start to stop breathing.
Now watch as all life fades away. 

You ask for the meaning 
Of my heart that is bleeding
It's cold so it all stays in place. 
You think you have found me. 
With death all around me. 
Tear up when you see my face.

Dark lies and Angels
Red eyes and chainsaws. 
You're here so there is no escape
Now please come nearer 
There's blood on the mirror 
Say your last words, this is your fate.

Author's Note

My all time first writing.
I thank you for reading this.

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

A very chilling tale and very impressive for your first write. The one piece of advice I can offer is to pare down some of the lines ...

For example Now that you see me ... just become ... you see me ... it will heighten the suspense and keep the reader closer to the page.

[Jack...]

Wow, very dark and creepy, but so well written. Nice job my new friend. Everyone needs a little horror now and again.

[Nicole Fox]

I had shivers down my neck as i was reading this. good job.

[Chance]

Nicely written. I liked it.

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for penning...:).................