Lies of the Modern Day

Shallow love
Smiling impostors
Festering frustration
Screams hidden under
white knit cotton
This is the world
in which we live
Pretenses pouncing
from every corner
Fraudulent thoughts
defining our souls

Reviews

[Devons]

The locomotive punchiness of this poem is really rewarding to the reader and is very effective in its communication of comment. It reads like a mantra, and the style and language is expressed with an angry strength which would be hard for even the most dismissive to ignore. The brevity of the piece adds to the effect, in that although there is an element of being left wanting more, the rhythm and sentiment of the words set a chain reaction in motion which carries on even after the reader has finished...
Very good work.

[Phoenix Poetry]

I've felt that way too many times to count so I completely understand

[Kathryn]

How the world is today, I agree completely.

[Laura Maidah]

"Pretenses pouncing" just rolls right off the tongue. Nice use of alliteration. The world is very flat sometimes, unlike this 3D poem of yours. Nice.

[curiouslyinsane]

I love the style of this piece! It's very candid, and I like the social commentary.

[Shoelissa]

Very deep! I enjoy your style of writing here! The truthfulness is amazing! I love it!

[Tammera]

Very well written. Amazing, speaks the truth for everybody. Love it.

[Talismanic]

You speak for us all,
creativity may be ostracised in this world
because we will not surrender to superficiality...
:)

[The White Wolf]

It is a shallow world, that is for sure. That is why it is up to us individually to not be. Nice work.

[Mackenzie Brooke]

this is really excellent, I write alot of stuff myself about the same topic. Great poem and great job! :)