In a Cemetery

While wandering through
cold granite plots
I came upon
a sorry lot

Their heads were bent
their arms around
while sleeping flowers
laid on the ground

Beaded droplets
mournful clouds
a mindful hush
upon the crowd

Gathered 'round
a lowered friend
with shattered hearts
no one can mend

Teardrops fall
as I looked on
wondering who will
mourn me when I'm gone

Reviews

[Greg Farina]

"Sleeping flowers"... I like that! Good poem!

[Gaia Octavia]

Thank you so much! 👍

[Gee]

Oooh, like this lots. So simple but saying so much and creating great images.
Good, good job

[Gaia Octavia]

Thanks a bunch! I'm glad you enjoyed it ☺

[Alex]

Wind and window flower solemn little sister. Beautiful

[Gaia Octavia]

I love Robert Frost. The poem 'within the Night' is my attempt at a tribute to him and his little snowy eve walk ☺

Thank you!

[emipoemi]

So solemn....so profound....so vivid. Well done!

[Gaia Octavia]

You're far too kind. Thank you!

[J.R. Ornelas]

Oh my gosh. I could see the scene before my eyes while reading this piece. Love it!

[Gaia Octavia]

Thank you very much ☺

[V.L.Mir]

Your curiosity with things to come and how you express it in words is very moving. This may sound weird, but as I read the lines, It appears to me like a unique blend of emptiness and abundance, that in my opinion, gives impact to the whole literary piece. Multifaceted, good job!

V.L. Mir

[Gaia Octavia]

Thank you very much. I do understand what you mean and I do feel that way quite often ☺

[James]

This is really great. I wonder the same thing.

[Gaia Octavia]

Thanks ☺

[LastMonth]

Once more it appears that your greatest strength in these poems is the way you finish them.
One haymaker after another you leave the reader with a sense of ''Damn.''

This one in particular seems to hold some pain in it. But more then that, I see here not personal pain alone, but solidarity with the pain around you. (Or the character.) Sometimes shouldering other people's woes is going to make your life hard.

But some people just can't help it.
Thank you for the poem.

[Gaia Octavia]

Thank you very much ☺

[Amy Unreal]

I could actually see this happening as I read! It felt like...ME! I love cemeteries, and plan my funeral every week. I am constantly thinking this very thing, "...who will mourn me when I'm gone". Great piece!

[Gaia Octavia]

I do quite the same thing ☺ Thanks!

[Tamika]

This is excellent and I cannot fault it, a beautiful and thought provoking piece of writing, a pleasure to read

[Gaia Octavia]

Thank you very much ☺