Lament

How sad it is
that after all that vaporous camaraderie,
the moment a raindrop is formed,
it is doomed to fall

Reviews

[Franky]

Your thinking and writing skills from those thoughts? 👍

A little sad.....but well done.

[Gaia Octavia]

A little sad is my middle name 😄

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful brevity. Excellent work.

[Gaia Octavia]

Thanks so much!

[Chris Shaw]

I wanted to capture this moment in slow motion. Utterly beautiful brevity.

Chris

[Gaia Octavia]

Thanks so much!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

how original
what a vivid way you described how the raindrop formed then was doomed to fall
how beautiful
i have never thought of it like that
thanks so much
xx for entry into my comp

[Gaia Octavia]

Thank you very much! 😊

[James]

Kind of a sad and depressing thought, beautifully phrased and the language is wonderful.

[Gaia Octavia]

Thank you, thank you very much *in my best Elvis voice

[James]

The Elvis voice only works if you can do the upper lip curl, but I heard you in my head and it was spot-on.

[Gaia Octavia]

Thank you, tha- oh wait we've been here before...

[stargirl23]

What an interesting write and what beautiful phrasing. Nice job!

[Gaia Octavia]

Thank you ☺

[W.k.kortas]

"(V)aporous camaraderie" is a brilliant phrase--not only is strikingly inventive, it works on several levels. Taut and clever little piece.

[Gaia Octavia]

Thank you very much

[Zugzwang]

I concur. A clear message, concisely and powerfully stated.
And it's time to do a Prometheus poem.
The eagle is hungry.

[Gaia Octavia]

It's on .

[Skylah Ginette]

Beautiful and poignant! Love the use of vocabulary and tone

[Gaia Octavia]

Thank you very much

[Chris W.]

This is awesome, it has lot of power for just 4 lines. I really like the second line, especially "vaporous camaraderie".

[Gaia Octavia]

Thank you kindly ☺