Change

What changed you?
A very interesting question indeed
I don’t know, it happened suddenly
I’ve lived my life to please others that I almost forgot about myself
I felt like why am I doing this?
I have dreams, things I wanted to do too you know
I’m not as expressive as before, that I literally told you that you matter, that kinda thing
I’m not that kind of guy anymore but I care
I’m still here you know, I hope you understand
I am and will always be your friend, one that you can rely on, you know that
I was there when no one else was, you know that
I hope you remember how I treated you as a friend
I hope you don’t misunderstand, I’m just doing what I think is right
I think you’re missing out the fact that I don’t hate you
It’s just that, we have things to do
I am getting old and so are you, time is of the essence
Yes, we’re enjoying life by interacting from time to time, I also missed those times
But things are not the same as it was before
Some things must come to an end at some point
I’ve reach to the point wherein I care but I don’t talk as much as before, but I care
cause you know
However noble your ideals are, not everyone will buy into them

 

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I was pretty much hating this guy the whole time & it got worse as it went on. I don't mean to say this is bad writing. It's good writing when you can portray a character who makes the reader feel something strongly. I felt so strongly that this narrator is putting a big long guilt trip on the other person. Just the opening made the hair stand up on my neck! I wanted to scream: what the hell is wrong with people evolving? Isn't that what life is all about? Then this annoying habit of saying "you know that" -- which is a manipulative technique where one person overpowers another verbally by not allowing them the right to disagree. It's like a "shutting up" remark . . . this guy is saying "you know I'm right, so just shut up." I really really really hate this guy. But there are tons of people like this who want to subjugate the other person. This is a strong & blazing profile of that kind of person on a power trip who thinks he can guilt-trip the other person into being his loyal subject (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Gabby The GAB]

This is really eye opening for me Margie! Thank you for the review :)))

[Brad]

Nothing stays the same and sometimes sitting quietly with yourself who needs no explanation or being alone is the best thing you can do for yourself.

[Ace Jaxon]

This is quite a wonderful poem, I am just now reading it, but the amount of energy coming off it is beautiful. It's sad when I have known too many people like the one the narrator is talking to. I am slowly learning how to live without someone who was controlling in my life, which I had been blinded to until I reached out for help. I'm struggling with my newfound sense of freedom and often feel guilt for what I did, but changing is part of life and I should be allowed like the narrator to do so.

[Gabby The GAB]

Thanks for having to atleast relate to this piece, I hope you're doing fine. Please ease your heart and Mind as slowly as possible, time is of the essence but change takes time ^^

[Ace Jaxon]

Thank you, please continue writing pieces and showing your work. It truly is beautiful.

[Kari Rakitan]

This is an interesting monologue. It started with the narrator talking about the self, but then seemed to shift to the other person with a sense of guilt. There's also a weariness, as if the other person hasn't changed at all in many years.