10 words

You’re the dazzle of brilliance, your beauty, it blinded me

You always had that flippant idea

An idea I just wanted to escape

Aren’t there handsome ways that came by?

Ain’t this taboo for you too, breaking my heart so gently?

Still, no words could send shivers to your slim frame

Whispering to the thin air of what would it be, really?

Once was a sweetheart, now, has a knife in my heart

well like they said, a wounded deer leaps the highest

As I fly past through the boulevard of broken dreams

 

Author's Note

contest

Reviews

[Wicahpi]

Good Morning Gabby,

Eloquently written for the 10 Words I Give contest.
Thank you for your entry and hope to see you next round.

I found the each word given was placed quite nicely in this bittersweet poem.
A poem most of us can easily relate to.

Favorite line: "... a wounded deer leaps the highest."
I never really thought of that, but it could be true.
I have seen them leap very high in the face of danger!

Good luck in the contest!

Blessings,
Wicahpi

[Gabby The GAB]

Thank you for reading it and giving a sweet review! :)

[barleygirl]

I am not a fan of 10-word challenges becuz I think it's a fake device like a crutch to help writers who think they can't think of something to write about. The thing is, in my observations, the writers who go for these dumb things are such naturally good writers, they don't really need a crutch. Maybe they need an injection of self-confidence. I only clicked on this becuz it was you (otherwise, I wouldn't bother reading a 10-word, becuz then I just have to rant my little rant). Anyhow, this is a very good poem & for the first time, I was actually somewhat interested in how you figured out how to use these particular words (usually, I believe nobody gives a s**t about these words but the writer). Still, I'm not in favor of bolding the words, becuz it really doesn't matter. Just let me read your message, which is well-stated & a little quirky with zigs & zags in different directions (feels like you're making a swerve to pick up the next "word"!) OK, I'll shut up. I can't stop bitching & I need to just go away now (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Gabby The GAB]

hahahaha thank you for being generous as much as to at least review this bored-made poem Margie!

[KWP]

Oh, well if this was a contest, then I commend you - your words are lively and full of emotion, you wove a weave here and it works very well. I like your take on the break - it seems this narrator is strong enough to keep going - I am happy about that X

[Gabby The GAB]

Thank you for the kind words, this poem was really for a contest :)) thanks!

[Unspoken poet]

Wow, so wonderfully written and emotional as well

[Gabby The GAB]

This was for a contest and amazingly, it won. thanks :)