If you were a superhero, you should name yourself “The
Mysterious”
Forcibly, you trained yourself very hard to the point that you bruised yourself
You punched mister Wall but you guessed that it was not your all
So you came back again and again and again and… again
Other superheroes might noticed it but you ain’t feeling their eyes
You felt nothing at all like you were in a brawl but bro
Start on feeling yourself, what you should be doing and should not do
We may have unique characteristics compared to the villains
But we are still the same in some ways
We attack, we protect but most importantly? We have respect
Our kin might expect too much from us because of how “strong” we are
We are still beginners in some scenarios in our life and we need them for who
we are
If our own family does not accept us for who we are then how can we?
As deep as it can get, being strong is just our mindset and we can’t just reset
As unique as we can get, we only have one life and this is all we can get
No matter how “strong” we are, there will always be an end but that end is not
today
No matter the weigh, we can just lift it anyway and we can do this every day
Spray away those who want to betray for they just want to play what we wanted
to convey
They should just walk away and pretend they portray something cliché, that
would be okay
Special day should start with something you obey, well, is there something you
wanna say?
Well again, the thing that you’re about to lay is again, a mystery
You wouldn’t carelessly let down your guard and say something directly
If you were to share then we will certainly be serious for something that
precious
Some will be envious and that will just matter from their point of views
But if you were not, then again, I guess this is obvious, you are one hella
Mysterious
I love everything you're putting down here, but these 3 lines are brilliant in message & rhyme:
Spray away . . . to convey
They should walk away . . . that would be okay
Special day . . . something you wanna say?
Frankly, I felt that your "superhero" idea (creative, but contrived) kinda frazzled on the vine as you warmed up & took this message into a more gut-level expression of things (honest raw expression always beats literary cleverness). All in all, many well-expressed ideas that go together into a strong word portrait about people who are mysterious (as all people usually are) Fondly, Margie
Posted 5 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
5 Years Ago
Thank you for liking it, this poem was for a friend's birthday, and she was the superhero in this on.. read moreThank you for liking it, this poem was for a friend's birthday, and she was the superhero in this one.
I love everything you're putting down here, but these 3 lines are brilliant in message & rhyme:
Spray away . . . to convey
They should walk away . . . that would be okay
Special day . . . something you wanna say?
Frankly, I felt that your "superhero" idea (creative, but contrived) kinda frazzled on the vine as you warmed up & took this message into a more gut-level expression of things (honest raw expression always beats literary cleverness). All in all, many well-expressed ideas that go together into a strong word portrait about people who are mysterious (as all people usually are) Fondly, Margie
Posted 5 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
5 Years Ago
Thank you for liking it, this poem was for a friend's birthday, and she was the superhero in this on.. read moreThank you for liking it, this poem was for a friend's birthday, and she was the superhero in this one.