Forget

When we were up all night
Seeing the ocean with no light
While playing sand with all our might
Dreaming, thinking about the sight
Do we really need to fight?
Think about it
Was it really worth it?
The frustration and sadness from all your treat
Saying bad things when you see fit
Well how was it?
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Well anyway, don’t fret
Is it okay to ask, are you even hurt?
Was this something that you want?
Promises you said you’d keep while knowing that you can't?
Time passed and you were always finding ways to tear us apart
In my life, you played a big part
You played too well like you played my heart
I was right from the start that you are smart
What you’ve done is a work of art and I am hurt
Saying sorry is not your thing sweetheart
Well knowing you, this is it, I should just depart
Forgive but don’t? … yep that’s it

 

Reviews

[Carol Cashes]

Nice flow, the right beat could take this right on up...."heard" it as I read it. That only happens for me a few times as I am not a poet and prefer straight lines from Point A to Point B. I am, however, a fan of rap/hip hop - lyricists only! No club tracks and this had that flow...you know...how it has to go....

[Gabby The GAB]

I am a rapper in some ways but I never published some of my tracks yet so I do get what you really mean, it is my pleasure and thank you for the review! :D

[barleygirl]

I love the way your message seems to dance around the word "forget" . . . the way you use it in the title, but you don't use it in the last line . . . as if you want the reader to make this connection. Even tho this narrator KNOWS he needs to forget, you can feel the reluctance very strongly . . . I don't believe this guy has the strength to walk away. I love messages that aren't always what they seem to be (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Gabby The GAB]

Thank you, you always amaze me by how you are sooo attentive about how the poem is made, that is really very reassuring for I mostly write my poems in a very "deep" manner, even my dots (...) have meanings too. wow just wow, Thank you for the Review! :D

[barleygirl]

I also pay attention to my dots . . . it takes one to know one! *wink! wink!*