A knight in shining armor

:) Just random thoughts :)

A knight in shining armor
Am I?
You said that, but it was before
Well, you should at least reply
I was altruistic
That I cannot deny
I guess you were realistic
And there are things we can’t pass by
With you, I was exultant
but I just don’t know why
You faked it and became distant
Please look at the sky
You said I am one of the stars
Sad story, well I am just a guy
And I do not have cars
I wanted to fly but there’s something I can’t defy
Look at the sky one more time
I should tell you that I was the moon, but I was shy
I could have been peculiar and sublime
At night, I’ll listen to you even if you cry
In the midst of darkness, I’d constantly glow
A knight at night that encourages you to aim high
Knight that lay lowed and will continue to grow
In times of unfortunate circumstances, I’d drop by
Shining Pillar of your life, I’d support you through it all
Armored with confidence and nobility, this is me saying goodbye

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This feels like an epic storytelling poem that takes us down a path that happens so often -- two people are "in love" (head in the clouds, crazy in love) . . . then time goes by & the other person is revealed to be a regular person, not a God or Goddess. Some relationships survive this reality check, but some don't. As I read the last half of your poem, I wasn't quite sure how it would turn out. It could have gone either way, but finally it ended on a "goodbye" note. That kind of suspense is what makes for animated writing & this is the strongest aspect of your storytelling in a poem (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Jade]

love your last 5 lines, very creative, This is a wonderful write

[Chryiss]

"I should tell you that I was the moon, but I was shy" This line is rather cute, and I really loved this and the lighthearted realness throughout the tone of this piece. The poem was easily understood in its progression from knight to human to human knight--someone who is brilliant like the stars as if they were some perfect celestial being to simply a human, a guy, like another other, to someone of strength, a human who has grown from their experiences enough to known when to and how to bid adieu~