Heaven

Suit yourself if all you need
is peripheral vision
and daylight
Lie to me
Die for me
numb yourself
or suffer in silence
speak through soil
stain me
in your favorite colour
so here I'll stay
in the Heaven
of your existence.


Response Verse by Jack Kennedy:

Lose yourself since all i crave
is your presence
and companionship
Use me
Abuse me
suit yourself
or descend from desire
dive through death
define me
in your own special way
so forever I'll lay
in this heaven
of your acceptance.

Author's Note

another great response verse from Jack, you're so awesome dude and you need to start posting more!

Reviews

[A Soap Mess Stories]

I love how the two collaborations fit perfectly...well-done to both of you...Gabby and Jack.

[Stephanie M]

This is a great poem. It is vivid, and full of imagery.

[Jennie Baron]

I do love the way those two verses fit together. Brilliant poetry, both of you!

[George Peck]

great poem thanks for sharing.

[PhoenixDown]

Very neat. Well done. Also fine attention to detail, which is something I appreciate.
Great job.

[guy drori]

"So forever I''ll lay in this heaven of your acceptance." I liked that line.

[Jack Kennedy]

I appreciate you for attempting to get me out of this slump I'm in right now, and your writing for giving me a new blueprint to follow.

[Gabby Nieves]

of course man, I miss seeing your stuff. There's very few people I can say that about on here these days lol and you were one of em