Against the Sky

Reflections of your red cheeks,

stop lights

Distant memories dancing all around

The paleness of your skin pressed against mine,

though it's been months since we've touched

Asphyxiated on your emptiness 

The flow of blood

That's what I wanted,

To exist against the sky

Boats crashing into tidal waves 

of missing you

Numbing myself to stay inside

Reviews

[Sebastian Falzarano]

This is beautifully written.
I also see some references, intentional or not, to the Greek Creation myth. Keep in mind that thhis assumptio is only if what I think the poem is about is true. The line "To exist aganist the sky" seems to imply sex, as Uranus and Gaia, land and sky, would be so close together, life couldn't exist between them until they were seperated. The previous lines "Asphixiated on your emptiness/The flow of blood/That's what I wanted" also supports what I think the theme of the poem is.
Now, I could be wrong, since I find no place for the lines "Boats crashing into tidal waves/of missing you./Numbing myself to stay inside" in this theme. Instead, considering that tidal waves can reach awesome heights, could it be that these boats are trying to climb those waves to reach the sky? In doing so, are they numbing themselves, in the context of drowning themselves in relation to numbing, to achieve this desire?
Considering that this poem may has multiple themes going on, different readers will interpet the poem in different ways. That is the essence of a completed work of writing. Great job!

[Jake Donald Stephens]

The power of expression, like a blade for cutting, works best when sharpened often. You are getting ever sharper, friend.

[Sebastian Falzarano]

The poem was interesting, considering the hint of Greek mythology in it.