Whatever Helps

If it helps 

We can leave town

Drive to the end of monotony 

And free the burden of our darkness,

Escape the shadows that have consumed our creativity.

Writing this now it feels I've been missing a part of me

I thought was caged and locked away 

When he left

Something's been killing me since he walked away 

This emptiness harboring inside me

Now I don't even remember who he was

Just another blank face

On the vast wall of existence

But I know one thing is fact

We will all die someday

Him, you, me

So what's it worth to you,

To leave it all behind?

To lose all you think you have

Forget the mask you've created 

In the desperation 

To forget that one day

You'll be nothing




Response Verse
By Jack Kennedy

If it helps
I haven't been the same
Leaving you was a mistake 
I suffer dearly for making such
Emptiness burst throughout

I don't know how you are now,
Just know I think of you always 
Forever I will miss the old times 
Wish I could come back to you.
I come back and I see your gone
Am I too late? 
Who have you run off with?
Why should I be surprised?
I left and now I have lost you
Lost in the world 
Mind torn to shreds
Knowing I will die one day
Without you here with me
You were everything to me
I hate myself for leaving it behind
My love for you will always be
Because I now realize without you
I am forever nothing

Author's Note

Special thanks to Jack for his awesome verse :))

Reviews

[Stephanie M]

I really enjoyed your poem, and great use of metaphors.

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Awesome write to both of you.

[Riley Justine]

Both you and Jack have created a beautiful piece here. The response verse is perfect. I love this piece. Well done to both of you!

[Saddam]

Wonderful creation, Both of you are amazing.

[AaronFreitas]

Awesome write... loved it :)

[Jennie Baron]

Brilliant writing, both of you! I was moved as I haven't been by a poem lately, and these words are truly memorable. Such sad notes of hopelessness come through. Thanks for sharing!

[Jack Kennedy]

Thank you for the words, always great to hear your thoughts and opiniopinion

[Jack Kennedy]

Opinion* don't know what happened there

[Jennie Baron]

:) it's all good

[Katrina]

This was amazing. I cannot even tell you how much I enjoyed it. Both pieces worked so well together, without being corny or overdone. You should both be really proud of the little landscape you've created here.

[Willard Wells]

I am very happy that I picked one of your pieces to read. Please don't ask how I picked you as that thought has already left the station. The darkness of your piece can bring fear for you because of it's dark feature, but you have just taken life and exposed what so many seem to try to hide from. When I read the last line "you'll be nothing", the thought that came to me is we are nothing now beyond our own false beliefs. Thank you for sharing your mind.

[Ashwin Thakur]

Truely touching you know sometimes the scars given to us by others create or force us to become an artist that colours or scars to make it invisible to the world but it seems our scars are too big to hide.
Surely an awesome read.

[Jake Donald Stephens]

Nothing ever helps. Not even drugs. All we can do is keep writing until we die.

[Gabby Nieves]

where you been?

[Jake Donald Stephens]

I've been around.