Neglected Perspective

Its 3:00 AM and my life has escaped
My mom is screaming at my body
Hoping I'll wake
Tears rushing down her face
The Earth can feel the pain coursing through her veins
What have I done?
What have I f*****g done!?
An hour ago I was starring at myself
Watching my eyes look back at me in disgust
I didn't move
I didn't breathe
Only the sounds of running water could muffle my inner screams
Help me Lord, please let me be free!
But what happened next only the Devil could accept
That demon grabbed a razor blade and put it to my neck
There were no distractions,
No second thoughts or reactions
My true self was shed as a single tear
That person in the mirror still glaring back at me
The blade pushed in deep
And in that moment, right before I fell to my knees
My reflection gave a wink
And I swear it smiled at me
I'm on the floor now
The medics say I'm dead
"Shes lost too much blood," I think one of them said
I take one last look
Away from the chaos
Beyond this horrific mess
And in the back of the room
Standing in the corner, wearing a dress
I see myself
Wrapped in perfection
My body without scars
Not a single worry lay on my fragile heart
I tried to look longer
To be sure of what I saw
But the world became an empty darkness
And there was only one thing left
A big black body bag
And a bloody f*****g mess

Author's Note

Anbody here believe in the supernatural?

Reviews

[George Peck]

Wow amazing like you were really there. Sometimes we get a glimpse of where our life is heading and are reminded why not to go there. What ever happen it made for one hell of a poem it actually gave me chills for me that doesn't usually with anything I read or see. Great Job, hope you feel better now.

[Gabby Nieves]

Thank you so much. I'm okay now, also.

[Jake Donald Stephens]

I think this is my favorite. It just gives me the most awesome f*****g nightmares. :)

[Taiken]

Crap this was great! I have to give credit where credit is due. You're a talented writer. Great concrete images. I actually clenched my fists while I read this. This stuff needs to be published!

[Gabby Nieves]

oh wow, thank you so much ccccc: ! I'm so glad you liked it

[Destined for Boring]

Believe in the supernatural? Of course.

At first, I was jealous that you had a mom that cared to ask you to wake. Then my memories of how I fantasized about slitting my own throat when I was younger. Then remembering my prayer to Satan to help me slit my wrist although your poem makes it seem like it wasn't wanted. (which I could be terribly wrong about)

The mesmerizing lines come next:

"I take one last look
Away from the chaos
Beyond this horrific mess
And in the back of the room
Standing in the corner, wearing a dress
I see myself
Wrapped in perfection
My body without scars
Not a single worry lay on my fragile heart"

Then a smile comes to my face ~ "But the world became an empty darkness"

Then of course the funny ending. In my perspective.

Anyways, really enjoyed the read!

[Gabby Nieves]

Well I mention supernatural because I saw this happen through my own eyes, it was like watching a movie and I wasn't me. Although, in a lot of my other poems I do talk about suicide a lot but this specific one was a time where I wasn't sure what came over me and though it didn't actually happen it freaked me out. But anyways, haha I'm glad you liked it and found the end funny. Thank you !

[Orlando Wynn]

As I read this I felt like I was on the other side of the mirror watching it all happen from a hazy third perspective. AND THAT ENDING jizzed my mind!

[Gabby Nieves]

lol ily you w***e