Dream Scheme (Pt. I)

short bit of automatic writing

I saw it once in a dream,

nothing could be, 

how it would seem

seen in reality;

it was far away and covered in a hazy fog,

lost to the perception of the eye,

crying the cries of a squealing hog,

as if saying its final goodbye.

It took physical form,

a corporeal body covered in fog;

though it was familiar 

it was not in the norm.

I have not seen it since

I peered through a window;

saw a man torn in half

between two dreams.

- G.W. Saitreux

Reviews

[olympiuslu]

Such an intriguing piece of writing..
"saw a man torn in half between two dreams" I just love this ending line, it sums up the whole poem up so well. Love how throughout the poem reality and the world of our dreams come together but by the end the 'man is torn in half' as if he can not be apart of these two separate worlds. That is my interpretation anyway. Overall, I found this very unique but at the same time powerful, amazing!

[G.W. Saitreux]

Thanks! This poem is heavily influenced by Andre Breton's Surrealist Manifesto

[olympiuslu]

Interesting, I will have to check it out!

[NoreChronicles]

I really enjoyed this...
It makes you wonder what is gonna happen next, I would love for you to drag it on some more😁

[G.W. Saitreux]

Thanks for the review! I will look into writing some more verses to accompany this poem as both reviews so far have mentioned that. Glad you enjoyed it!

[siobhan]

This would be an excellent book. I enjoyed how it was taking us through the motions.

[G.W. Saitreux]

I'm not of the intent to write a book at this point in time yet I appreciate the review, thanks for reading!