Those Dark Clouds

               

      

                                                            Those Dark Clouds

I like it when the dark clouds occupy the sky,

It's like my worries are veiled; their divulgence isn't nigh.

The surroundings are soothed, I am contained within me,

I close my eyes, and feel others can't see !

The advent of the clouds , sometimes makes me feel,

That He's there to veil that, which doesn't let me heal.

And that there'll be nectarous rain, which shan't cease,

And hailstones for the worries, which devour all peace !

The blabbering mouths shall be shut, by the mighty thunder,

And the flash of lightning shall pass, above and under.

The gowns of hypocrisy will be visible then,

Holding which the snobs shall run away when!

But for now, with these clouds, I am content, O' dear,

For these instill serenity, and peace seems near !

       

Reviews

[June Fowler]

Holding which the snobs shall run away when!

Holding which, when the snobs shall run away!.........

A nice poem. Every cloud has a silver lining!

[Avinash]

The unspeakable struggle took the form of clouds and then there is hope of freedom and redemption in your words. I like the presentation.

[Dayran]

The clouds may hide the truth ... but it also teases us with its tiny revelations ... of what the truth comprises. Nice ...

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Thank you for thy review Dayran :-)

[Inda]

It starts a little vague, bit it picks up and by the last two line it is clear just what these clouds remind you of and why you are at peace upon the sight of them. Great write!

[sushobhan]

Not extremely sure how to review this one..."Black clouds occupy the ambience and worries getting stifled",,,Usually,the tenebrosity suggests gloominess...But if imagery is considered as domain, You have pictured a very nice stuff here....Especially, "Nectarous rain, Blabbering mouths, Advent of the clouds" portray the classical shade to the framework of this verse...And 'AA' rhyme scheme has always been my favorite.....But please, reconsider the first 2 lines....

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Thank you Sushobhan.
I did not actually get your point regarding the first two lines.
For me, yes, clouds seem to 'stifle' worries, as I feel everything becomes quite and silent; the unwanted things to be tolerated in bright 'sunshine' , where everyone is running here and there, are no more visible; everyone is 'inside' (homes/within themselves) and so does one ('I' specifically) gets an opportunity to get contained within himself.

[anne]

But for now, with these clouds, I am content, O' dear,
For these instill serenity, and peace seems near !....extremely beautiful..:))

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Thank you anne :-)