Dreadful Fever

                      Dreadful Fever

Oh! thou dreadful fever of ages,

Thou hast split and trapped me in different cages,

Thou makest me scream; screams which only I can hear,

And which create conundrums,and escalate fear.

Weights on my eyelashes, thou have placed,

Both, will and valor,have been chased.

The soothing winds swirl in my mind,

Of that which is gone, they do remind.

I am a lonely spectator,looking at the stage,

This phase is nothing, but just a vantage.

A rampage of anxieties, at times is there,

At times just nothing, with nothing to care.

My emancipation, is farewell thine,

Thy dissipation, by some force divine.

Which shall leave behind a solemn future,

And the wound shall heal; I shall remove the suture.

May I sleep for good, if a dream this is,

But if thou are one, may I wake up in bliss !

Reviews

[Vishuddha]

Delirium at its best. All of life's intensity at once and a door which opens one way or another. What more need be said?

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Yes, I was in delirium, when I wrote this :-)
Actually there are two doors. The beginning of the poem describes the door of comfort closing, due to the 'fever', but the ending part, describes how a door of 'hope' opens (through which I shall walk).
Btw I did not get, did you happen to like the piece or not? :p

[Vishuddha]

Oh, yes. Very well written. Your description of delirium, "screams which only I can hear" is very good - chilling. I take your line "This phase is nothing, but just a vantage" to speak of the realization, in a delirium which brings you closer than usual to death, that this life is only a part of the unending cycle of life and death and the stark reality of life, boiled down to its essence, is a pendulum swinging from anxiety to nothingness well illustrates the extremes the mind experiences in an illness. Your last stanza seems to say, if life is but a dream within a dream, I would dream on, "May I sleep for good, if a dream this is," yet, if I do not dream, "if thou are one" - one what? What but the subject of your paragraph, or stanza, your emancipation? And what might be emancipation from life but death? And, if this be my death, "may I wake up in bliss". This may, perhaps, not be what you had in mind but it is what works for me. I see the whole piece as a struggle between life and death, and well done.
Your rhyming structure also works well although rhyming stage with vantage works much better in writing than in recitation. My personal belief is that poetry needs to be spoken but this is a small point in a very well crafted work. (If I had written this I would have been well pleased)

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

You have understood the poem very well Vishuddha, and I especially liked your understanding of the last stanza. Most of the people who've read this piece, don't tend to understand the last stanza.
Thank you for your words :-)

[sushobhan]

"The soothing winnow just blows out the vitiated constraints of mind" and a blend of much more matured craft is tied up with this poetry....Good stuff, poet...

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Thank you for your kind review Sushobhan ;-)
BTW, did u get the link to my profile from Quora? #Just asking.

[Fatima]

You are such a talented writer and your work is inspiring, don't ever stop because this, my friend, is a piece of art.

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Thank you so much for your kind review friend Fatima :-)

[Norman T]

The eloquent language in this poem enhances the depth of thought of mature old age contemplating the meaning of life. Was there a purpose, did I achieve it, was it worth it?

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Thank you for kind review sir ;-)

[Inda]

A great write that questions everything and deals with it honestly. We dont know, thats the truth. Great piece!

[John Anderson]

A unique and beautifully expressed poem. This is very nicely written.

[Mayank]

Nice work, sounds like an aging man recollecting his golden days.

[Dayran]

A long and hard look at life's many self regulations ... when we imprison our frivolity ... in order to regain the mind of reason. Its a wonderful testimony of friends ... who are aware ... and bring a hand ... to keep company. Nicely done Gurdeep ...