THAT FLIGHT OF MINE

                          That Flight Of Mine

               At the place of my dwelling, I was content still,

                        Until the anxiety escalated and weakened my will,

                        For the time was imminent; days left were few,

                        When I had to fly, to begin anew.

                       During that flight of mine, when I was amidst the clouds,

                       I wished to be like them; gratified and without bounds.

                       But it was not for me, I knew

                       I had to get down to begin anew.

                      Anticipations, thoughts in my mind were there,

                     My worries and thoughts with whom shall I share?

                     Like what would it be there for me?

                     Joy and comfort I cannot foresee.

                    The ones flying with me, seemed to be perfect,

                    Adapted to the environment; strong and adept.

                   Or acquainted with the truth , they weren't may be,

                   Wrapped in an illusion, yet seemed to be free!

 

                   An illusion, yes, there was, for me too

                   When except contemplating, I had nothing to do.

                    A little away from worries during the ascent,

                   Again absorbed in them, during the descent!

                 As  that flight of mine was about to end,

                Content to get down; I did pretend.

                I called upon You, as I neared the ground,

                Not knowing what was where to be found!

 

 

Reviews

[ShelleyA]

A good write about a journey, the affect of change and a slight fear of flying. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy. Nice imagery, good flow and tone. Line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Rhyme is good. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Good depth of feeling; you express your worry and anticipation about this new place that I can relate to well. Good word choice. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Just a note: in line one of stanza one, I think the word should be 'contented' and the last word in line four should be one word 'anew'; in the second stanza, line four: last word should be one word 'anew'' and in the last stanza, line two: the first word should be 'Contented'. Nicely penned and a good read. Write on!

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Thanks Shelley..And ya I did ake some spelling mistakes :P

[ShelleyA]

You're welcome. Have a good day.

[Olivia]

I really liked the tone in this piece, it clearly represents the thoughts of what one feels when they travel to a new place that they know nothing about and how that can be a nerve racking feeling especially if that is the place you are about to call your new home. This piece also had good rhythm and flow which helped paint a clear image. Good Work!

[redflutterby]

The thoughts within this piece are well expressed. Taking a flight to a new place often makes you consider what you are leaving and what you will find. This has a nice flow to it also. :-)

[Great Aunt Astri]

This reads with a wonderful rhythm. Your rhymes are natural sounding, not at all contrived (like some of mine!) Good to see this type of poetry. Loved it!

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Thanku Great Aunt :-)