What Is It We're Doing

Thoughts on a situation a friend is in.

 

 

What is it we're doing

when we covet another's spouse?

Acting like a theif

breaking into their house.

 

To steal what's not ours

to fulfill our own selfish lust.

Destroying a fam'ly;

can we say that's just?

 

Taking from children

one of their parent's presence

so we can make our life

a little more pleasant.

 

Is it selfish to want

what is rightfully another's?

To deal them a blow from

which they can't recover?

 

Is it right to desire

that which can never be our own?

Or should we walk away

and just leave them alone?

 

 

Reviews

[justjenn_2u]

Wow! What an interesting topic. Now you never cease to amaze me with your creative mind. You are a deep thinker, so I see. This poem brings about many mixed emotions to me. What if the wife is not happy, what if she can't get away from the husband because of losing her children, what if he beat her down to feel like nothing? What if? What if? And then I see it from a husband's view. I am speechless. You are a brilliant poet, I, too, must say!!!

[Kitty]

Wow. Lots of pain evident in this poem. I cannot say much about whether is it right or wrong, because I have been in the position of the 'stealer' way too many times. And although I cannot say that I am proud, I cannot change what has already happened.

Great flow, great rhythm, and as is the case with all your poems, a great write!!!

Josie

[Fantasyfairy]

A thought provoking poem, and not one that has an easy answer since it would depend on the circumstances and the people involved. A wonderful write that makes people think, just what poetry should be about. Xx

[JC Fox]

A very thought provoking piece and it does pose some good questions about falling for another's spouse or significant other. The kicker is if they fell over the internet, I don't know situations like this never end up finishing pretty. Good job!

[Marie]

This was a great poem, thanks for sharing it with me.

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

LEAVE THEM ALONE!! thats what should happen... Agh... I hate cheaters, but isn't it more of the spouse's fault than the other persons? Yes, you shouldn't lust after your neighbor but still... This is a very well written piece I love it... touches on a good idea and thought.... Great job!

[J.P.O.et]

Wow, very philosophical question here.
Very true too, but what of those that are truly unhappy
in this world and feel bound by marriage and children?
Does that provide a 'happy' environment for any involved?
Very thought provoking here, as there is two sides to every story.

J.P.O.et

[V. K. Harris]

He should walk away and come back another day, but only if its safe to say, it happened without his blame, only then can he stay. Great write my friend.

You did it again- and never cease to amaze me with the depth of the topics you choose to write about. Very powerful poem and from a perspective not many are used to. Its nice to see a husbands point of view ( a husband scorned).

[Aries]

Nice work, very raw. Very well versed, I feel the pain of loss..

This is a wonderful read~

[Enigmatic Amor]

Powerful statement here. This one packs a solid punch. Awesome.

My only little nit is "theif" in the third line....thief.

Excellent read. Thank you.