Can't Wait to Go

Just having a bad day.

 

 

 

I am just so bored.

Sitting here alone.

No one on line.

No one to phone.

 

Nothing on the TV.

No mood to play games.

Don't want to read.

All days the same.

 

No one to talk with.

I'm feeling so blue.

No place to go.

Nothing to do.

 

No more family.

Not even one friend.

Here all alone.

Is this how it ends?

 

My life I've wasted.

Not one thing to show.

Just years of struggle.

I'm ready to go!

Reviews

[Enigmatic Amor]

Your title and the last line are in the same mood...one of excitement. The rest of the piece speaks of loneliness and boredom. I like the way it starts with little trivial things then builds to the true sadness of futility.

Two grammatical items...1st line of the second quatrain (I believe this is the proper word)

"Nothing on the TV" The word 'the' seems unnecessary if you are following the flow of the first 4 lines.

The other is that I was surprised by the puntcuation mark at the end...but perhaps you intended the uplift.

Perhaps this is much more than you wanted me to say, but I just received a great constructive review last night and thought I'd pass something along in the same vein.

Thanks so much, I really enjoyed the read. Your poetry speaks volumes my friend.

[JC Fox]

A great write, good job and keep up the good work

[Erin Phoenix]

I hate that feeling. Boredom... loneliness...

It leaves your soul sore.

I love this...

:)