Im a cat meow(the first thing i ever wrote)

Now this is horrible, the first thing i ever freken wrote.

Creating a gang

Cesly is a pink cat person with pink hair. Her brother zane is a big black dog who wears a black tshirt and dark blue jeans. Cesly and her brother zane were in the town walking down the street. I think it would be cool if we had some sort of group. What do you mean? I mean like a gang. You mean like in scooby doo? No I mean like turf wars guns and all of that stuff. Well that name is misleading. No its not and thats not are name. Whats are name? Its tornado. Why is it called that? Well uh i don't know. What do you mean that you don't know? It just sounds cool and know that your in it its extermly cool. I did not say i was joining. Oh but you are she said with a sinester smile. Remember what happened the other day? No i don't what hapened? You remember what hapened. No i don't. Well you have to. Why? Because i don't remember what happened. Well if no one remembers then why dose it mater? It maters because i know that what ever hapend has a reason that you should join. But nothing ever hapened!! I guess lm joining so now what? How should i know? What do you mean your the leader of this gang so you should know what to do next. Maybe i do maybe i don't why should i tell you? Because lm a member. If your a member then wheres your card? You never gave me one. So wheres your card? celsy. Its right here. She showed it to him it was a pice of paper with her name written in crayon. Her pictture was also drawn in crayon. Thats not a real card you just made that up. Thats how all membership cards look. Why do you care you not even in one. I am in a gang he shouted. Then abouted a thousand gang members from diffrent gangs poped out of nowere.

Author's Note

This is bad, this is really so you all can laugh at me. so laugh. its untouched on purpose, so the grammar is not fixed to show you how i was back then, now i might re write this soon but who knows. I wrote this in 9th or 10th grade

Reviews

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

Horrible?! Psssh, no such thing. This is awesome and very creative! ^^ a animal gang is better than a human gang (in my opinion) :D
This would also would be better if it was a book, just sayin ;)
The grammar errors dont matter, it only matters if its from your mind c:
A very great work indeed ^^
100/100

[Rika]

Well it was a book, i just took the part i liked and took away all the story elements

[Lino Rie]

I think it's good, But hey I'm not a A class writer or anything the first thing I ever wrote I never finished. That said, don't think so low of your self. Great story.^-^

[CecilA]

GED,

Great starting piece. It contains all the elements of a short stort. I admire your willingness to reveal your first writing. Also, you can look back and compare it with your capabilites today and see how well you have progressed.

Thanks for sharing this story with us. It could be developed into an great children's story.

[Mark Emerson]

Well we can see a few things one how much you've improved and two you like to leave a
Story open and ready to carry on

[Bluefire]

This is cute and pretty well written considering the age you wrote it.
If you clean it up and add mote to it it would make a great story, I love the characters BTW ^^

[(Super) Heroes Never Di..]

Adorable start. :) It has potential if you ever wanted to run with it. It made me smile:) you're quite creative.

[♪Barklight♪]

so... was it his gang he was yelling about jump out or did other gangs hear him and wanna pick a fight???? other that that it was awsome ^_^

[MandaBear]

Very creative. You can really see how you have improved since then. It is nice to be able to look back and see how you have changed.

[Felicity's Eve]

I find this somewhat cute. ^^

You've majorly improved since then. :)

[Andie]

Aww, haha. It's okay. I'm sure my writing back then was just as terrible. :)
How old were you when you wrote this?

[Rika]

this is when i posted it on my other writing site 19-09-2011, i think maybe minus one year.