[Gone]

[Gone]

A Poem by Prince of Poetry
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Gone

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I see you laying there

No more worries

No more cares

These feelings to bare

You gone

No feelings to share

I gasp…

No Air

© 2008 Prince of Poetry


Author's Note

Prince of Poetry
This actually has many different views...some people look at it as an intimate piece... "Its actaully the lost of a friend and looking at them in a casket" How do you see it..?

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Wow my friend I found out died two mos ago and i really believe this is what I would have felt if I'd been able to go to the funeral

Posted 14 Years Ago


That is exactly how I saw it and I don't think I could see it any other way.
Helen :-))

Posted 16 Years Ago


I would say from my own perspective that this piece brought about a sense of being alone and loss of someone leaving the feeling of despair. Good imagery and short with well penned words,

Good Job!!!

Dostani

Posted 16 Years Ago


Oh my goodness, soo sad. I love your word usage here, its so short and simple yet i feel like youve told me the whole story of whats happened . Great piece... and your lying :) its way better then mine.

-Courtney

Posted 16 Years Ago


as i feel when my love is gone
the very air itself is gone
saying that i need you to exist

Posted 16 Years Ago


this is a sad poem that sheds light on a lost love, Gone is a great title for this one..I think that you chose your words well because you didnt use that many to begin with and yet i still felt this one..i felt the pain of your character..I also like the rhyming..I enjoyed the read..
Well From One Word-Play Poet To The Next...Always Remember To Write With Your Heart!

s~Shanty~s

Posted 16 Years Ago


Very powerful, compact poem here....it is good because it tells a story, yet is abstract enough to leave the reader with questions....

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 17, 2008
Last Updated on February 29, 2008

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Prince of Poetry

Atlanta, GA



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