blitzkrieg serenade

a circling pit of restless climate can never commit
to a cosmetic vice of generic print.
the uninspired matching of socks, the
repetitive mention of pink to compensate
for the zipping sounds an umbrella makes when
angel piss runs down its flared back. half inch
attention spans peter out a quarter way down
the trail of a platonic screen.

replicated heroes reproduce duplicated copy.
like a duplex sandwiched between twin mirrors.

and vigilante planets get ripped from their axis.
publicly lambasted for the use of inappropriate poetics.
so says the didactic dianetics of militaristic critique.

when a dry scalp is confronted with the challenge
of a spacious grouping of charging alphabet, the
typical result is a balding curse of superfluous syntax.
while disobedient bombs of chambered hale
bottle over in asthma inducing laughter, eager
for that rush of the next assault.

first, the sound is like a babies earliest footsteps,
one at a time, in succession. then, the bats of
frenetic taps of key. growing. echoing. then finally
a full blown storm of fist sized ideas hammer down.
leaving dents and welts. shooing academic toupees
from the shiny domes of plasticized article.
visual exposition is the next open target.

commodity is no longer a safe sanctuary for poor hobby.

and currency holds no merit down here.

imagine that.

Reviews

[Brette Medb]

I really liked this piece a lot. You always have a way of poetically condemning those who want to stick with all they know and societies rules and make it sound like we should be ashamed of it, which of course we should be.

leaving dents and welts. shooing academic toupees
from the shiny domes of plasticized article.
visual exposition is the next open target.

I loved these lines and I found it amusing after I read the toupees part that there was an advertisement next to your poem that said control your hair loss lol.. just some ironic fun. Great write as always!

Brette

[Luna]

I really enjoyed this piece, I especially enjoyed how you used your vocabulary. This is wonderful, I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Hedra Helix]

HAH,
heck yea, be you. say it strong.

[Touché Armada]

I know you have some deep possibly not so deep meaning behind this piece but I'm trapped with the image of that little cartoon stick figure toon smashing its fingers then hands and lastly head to a bloody pulp. I have come here over and over and tried to regroup each time and CANT, I just stop at this might be a shout out to ammeter scribblers like me to shut up and write something worth reading, man if thats the case you might have a forever wait LOL .. Sorry hapless hopeless review of your work. Forgive me? Nahhh I wouldn't. =)

[Sexy Jones]

I love it when you invite me to review your work.

My favorite part:
"replicated heroes reproduce duplicated copy.
like a duplex sandwiched between twin mirrors.

and vigilante planets get ripped from their axis.
publicly lambasted for the use of inappropriate poetics.
so says the didactic dianetics of militaristic critique. "

The way you put together words is amazing.
You always leave me in awe of your talent.

[Gary H]

Now I'm speculating that this is a reflection on society risen from the ashes of World War Two. I'm not sure how we have become in the state we are in or what the reasons are. Maybe we all think that there's not long to go and so we should take what we want and destroy the world whilst we still have the power to do so. But what am I saying here? Who is the 'we' that I'm talking about? Maybe I should ask around?
I'm taking up your final suggestion here - 'imagine that'.......

Great work as usual.

[Steve Thompson]

WOW man, I love this piece, seriosly there is little I can say but juat it was amazing. Thanks for sharing it.

[Monners]

"the zipping sounds an umbrella makes when
angel piss runs down its flared back"

I like that part. Creative. Well written overall, Id say.