Chapter One

It's the first day of school. Everyone is excited as they roam the halls to find their new teacher, except for little Suzie.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

She is unable to filter out her five senses. To her the sounds are heightend, and she could hear a fly buzzing. Also to her the lights in the room are extremely bright, and she cannot see. This has already created stress for her. She is becoming overwhelmed because of all of this. She is overwhelmed by all the people in the room who are walking by her and bumping into her.

 

This is known as

 

Asperger Syndrome

Author's Note

Names changed to ensure privacy.

Reviews

[Weaver]

This made perfect sense to me. Probably because I have this kind of experience a lot myself. (Bet you hate places like Wal-Mart, too. Talk about a hell of noise and commotion...!)

I don't think the photo is necessary, although it isn't a problem either. What would be better, I think, is if you had a drawing of your own that really expresses how you feel when this sort of thing hits you.

"hightened" should be "heightened" - comma after it
comma after "extremely bright"
"This is already created stress" - "This has already created stress"
no comma after "walking by her"

[Kate Hunter]

well done so far. I know a few people who have Aspergers'. Keep writing.

[Carter Meyer]

this was a bit hard to understand. you might want to make it a bit more clear for the reader. but other than that, it's good :)