Looking for Light...

Story of a girl who never gave up..

Once upon a New Moon

The night was dimly lit

She stood by the window

Trying to find the sky

The fog was too cruel to hide it from her

So she had thought every night

How she longed to find one tiny speck of light

But alas! To her disappointment!

She struggled and strived

Tried to stretch her eyes wide

All she felt was darkness

All she could catch was void

Sad yet ever hopeful she turned around

Walked with faltering steps back to her bed

She had a habit of reading herself to sleep

She reached for the unfinished book

Placed her fingers on a page defined;

The Braille faded under her fingertips

A new story shaping up in her mind…

 

Author's Note

This one is very close to my heart.Hope you'll like it :)

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem is heavy. You wrote with an elegant style, but there are serious lessons to be learned beneath the layer of artistic beauty. I never got the feeling that all was lost as I read this poem, so I began to question the difference between being alone and being lonely. It seemed to be that sometimes a little alone time is necessary to explore who and why we are what we are...also who and what we would like to be and how to get there. (*but that is a side note*) The fog was very symbolic to me, because even if the fog were not there, there would still be no moon. Then finding her to be blind just added an entirely different element to it all, because even if she could see and the fog got removed there would still require a tremendous amount of faith to never consider herself lost to the darkness. Her hope against hope made her especially powerful to me as I entered the last line. I left feeling that just because we cant see it...doesnt mean it doesn't exist....and...sometimes an ending is just another beginning. You inspire a lot of thought. This was deep.

[Frozen Eyes]

Thank U for the wonderful review and the way U interpreted it is exactly what was on my mind while framing this one. Thank U for liking it :)

[C. Lee Battaglia]

I really like this poem, it has great detail and a great meaning.
I think your writing is some of the best poetry that I've ever read! Awesome, Awesome job FG (Is it ok if I abbreviate your name?)
I see a lot of potential in your writing!
Keep up the amazing work! :)

C. Lee Battaglia

[Frozen Eyes]

Thank U so much for the appreciation. Im still learning to express and Im glad your words motivate me in the process. And yes its completely fine if U abbreviate my name I like "FG"
:)

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Ok FG Great job!
Your wrok is amazing!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

work*.......

[TheLostMind]

Wow. Amazing. The emotions are really strong and almost palpable. I love the way you describe the aura around the main character / girl, quite picturesque.

"Placed her fingers on a page defined;
The Braille faded under her fingertips
A new story shaping up in her mind…" - These lines touched me the most.

A really good write :)

[Frozen Eyes]

Thank U for liking & reviewing it :)

[TheLostMind]

You are welcome :)

[Mayank]

I don't let my void go easily, I extract as many words as I can... if life is cruel, I am the cruel master! Jokes apart. I love the flow here, it's feels like the piece someone has written about themselves, about the things that has created darkness around us. The light is more like a love, the inner peace which is lacking.. very good piece.

[Frozen Eyes]

Thank U for the review :)

[PearlPoet]

"The fog was too cruel to hide it from her"

"She struggled and strived
Tried to stretch her eyes wide
"
Brilliant.. ~hugs~

[Frozen Eyes]

Thank U Pearl :) *smiles*