The Beginning

Vitas Homeland.

Vita is a teenage girl who lived in an isolated village, in that village she didn't get what other teenagers got, she saw them play around and live their lives, while she's there prisoned like an animal, she just wanted her freedom and didn't know why she is prisoned, she got prisoned because of her tattoo or mark on her arms,
called the healers mark, she was an orphan so the village chief thought of taking care of her, but after finding out she had that mark, he grew selfish and thought of selling her to the kingdom because he knew she was rare and could fetch a very high price, he decided to sell her only when the time is right, that is when she is able to use her abilities to heal his right arm, he lied to his village telling them she's dangerous and that they shouldn't fall for her and her cry of help, that she's a demon because of that mark, they trusted him because he was knowledgeable and was the one arranging the villages business and keeping them together, he didn't earn his position as the village chief for nothing, that village didn't know much about the outside world except for him so he used that knowledge for his advantage, she knew he was lying and had enough torment, so she planned for an escape, the chief lets them give her food and clean her prison every so often so she doesn't get sick so she can be sold properly, even tho she can heal people she can't heal herself and he knew that so he didn't want to risk her getting sick, so when the worker finally went inside the prison to clean, she grabbed the cleaning stick when he was closing the door and hit him in his throat when he turned around, he was choking which gave her an opening to escape and so she took it.

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

Don't overuse words if you can.

You used "prisoned" three times in the first couple sentences. Good writing is generally about creativity and word economy. You have a good story but you f**k it all up with your vernacular.

Try harder to be more vocabulary diverse.