Senryu On A Train.

A set of Senryu to describe a train journey.

Train runs like wildfire.
Sparks fly from the rust steel tracks.
In the sky, sun smiles.

The silver serpent
slithers noisily to interrupt
my sweet thoughts of you!

Tall skeleton trees
wave their branches to the sun
and say “Good morning!”

Some fluffy white clouds
drift in unison across the blue sky,
the sun reappears.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like the second one....when I hear a train passing, I actually think of an old girlfriend and watching her leave one day...it was back in 1970, when I started writing poetry...maybe I did when that happened...shed a lot of tears that afternoon.
I like the sunshine in these...uplifting.
j.

[Marie]

Dear J... Please forgive me for creating a poem which brought a sad memory to you. I am truly sorry and wish with all my heart that the memory was very happy and comforting. So sorry for all the tears you shed on your girlfriend's departure also. Been there, done that too! Thank you so very much for reading the poem and for your kind words too. Bless you always, dear J...

[Amy R]

Beautiful senryu collection,
the 2nd and last one is very nice, and my favs...
Great imagery seen in this set as well
-Amy

[Marie]

Thank you for reading and for your kind words, Amy...

[Amy R]

You're welcome

[Marie]

Thank you, Amy 🌸🌸

[Relic]

I like each one because I can see them in my mind's eye.
Nice writing and picture.

[Marie]

Thank you for reading, dear R... and for your lovely comment, so kind and encouraging too...

[emmajoygreen]

You really are a mistress of the Senryu art. creating a story set to form, yet singing s its own song. Lovely, perfect!

[Marie]

Hello Emma. Thank you for reading and for your too kind comment. I am so pleased you enjoyed reading this poem! Thank you for your very encouraging words, dear Emma. Wishing you a very nice, relaxed and pleasant evening to enjoy...

[emmajoygreen]

Had a busy, exhausting day, but others have far worse. Hoping to catch some sweet dreams if time allows after the not long recent past!.

[Marie]

Will light a candle at my Angel altar for you to help you catch some sweet dreams. I feel the hurt, the ache within and I know how very difficult it is to bear, Emma. It is good to keep busy, but please don't over do it! PLEASE take very good care of you as I will now ask the Angels to help you do. Sleep well, deeply and enjoy the most beautiful dreams of a better and brighter tomorrow. Sending Angel blessings with HUGS, dear Emma...

[emmajoygreen]

One day we'll gather our Angels to dream of calm and smiles and... and... all else we can, if we can. Why not!

[Marie]

Agree, dear Emma... Wishing you a very Good morning, a very joyful, blessed and happy day, dear friend. Thinking of you, candle lighting, Angels by your side...

[emmajoygreen]

I've lit quite a few candles over the years.. and always will. Everyone needs a little empathic and ready light at times.

[emmajoygreen]

OOPS. forgive, I should have wished you a happy good afternoon.. is 12.26 in the UK, England. Of course, silly me, you know that! We live in a roller coaster time in the Cafe, yes?!

[Marie]

Thank you so v-e-r-y much for your kind greetings, dear Emma. Same time in Ireland as I too, wish you a very lovely, relaxed, pleasant and blessed afternoon. Yes, life is filled to overflowing with ups and downs, but hopefully, we will have more ups than downs, Emma. Angel Blessings your way...🌻🕯️🤍🕯️🌻

[emmajoygreen]

We think alike at times, sail the same seas and wander the same hills.. in mind or otherwise, Marie! Imagination and need is often reached when one wants to.. don't you think?!

[Marie]

Yes, I so agree, dear Emma... and yes, we are alike in some ways too... Thank you so very much and wishing you a very pleasant, peaceful and relaxed evening to enjoy, dear friend...

[emmajoygreen]

I always hope to have a very pleasant, peaceful and relaxed evening but, that inevitably depends on so many things and people!! One can but hope and pray that smiles open the door!!

[Marie]

When the door opens you will be smiling, dear Emma... All IS well, dear friend...

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

This really took me to a train🚂🚋🚃🚋🚃🚋🚃 journey Marie. Amazing work. Thanks for sharing.

[Marie]

I so appreciate you reading this poem and for your very kind and encouraging comment, Sky. Love the little Emoticons! They're adorable! Thank you so very much, dear poet...

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

You're most welcome Marie!!!

[Marie]

Thank you so very much, Sky!!!

[Soren]

What a marvelous touch stringing together a series of senryus making a greater image. Simply lovely and very artistic as well as creative. From the beginning you have ingeniously woven fire into all three lines with sparks and the sun as well as its mention in the first line as wildfire. Alliteration forms the second stanza with a sound like a snake "silver serpent slithers" it is so visceral sending shivers, much like the involuntary shivers of love. Very nice Marie

[Marie]

Dear Soren, I do appreciate and treasure your amazing reviews. A very warm heartfelt thank you for reading and for your wonderful review which you so kindly blessed me with. Gratitude with beautiful blessings your way, dear friend...

[red93]

Really beautiful Work Marie, so cleverly put together and achieved. Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Marie]

Thank you for reading and kindly commenting, red93...