A Wintery Day In Summer.

Waves hum tunes to daisies white
as sun shines down, to their delight.
The daisies dance gently to and fro
and whisper secrets only the waves know.

Jealous rain begins to fall.
No shelter for the daisies tall.
The wind joins in and blows for fun.
Sweet petals fall, as if shot by a gun.


The waves so angry rush to shore
but cannot reach the daisies now at death’s door.
The daisies hang their heads and sigh
as the wind whips them up and leaves them to die.

Reviews

[Kane Hagwood]

Those poor daisies; sounds like nature itself is out to get them. Whatever place this is written about sounds lovely. The lines "The wind joins in and blows for fun; Sweet petals fall, as if shot by a gun" is pretty powerful. There's a lot of intense emotions in this poem about sweet daisies just trying to live their best lives, only to be batted around by the elements.

[Marie]

Hello Kane and thank you for kindly reading my poem and for your so kind review. I am most grateful...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting concept of the rain being jealous....
it nurtures the flowers with its soothing drops and then causes what it helped make to drop dead.
j.

[Marie]

Thank you for reading and for your insightful words, J...

[Samuel Dickens]

The ways of nature are beautiful, cruel, but always wondrous. Daisies will rise up again, the waves will swell, and the play will repeat itself again and again, stirring our emotions each time. Marvelous words, Marie.

[Marie]

Agree 100% Sam. Thank you for reading and for your kind words. Bless you always...

[Soren]

Nature, to we humans, seems at times merciless. Never the less fairness, mercy are human concepts. The whole first stanza reflects what we may call the gentleness and warmth of nature. The second stanza rain personified as jealous and also the wind. Here we see the human effect of bullying. The last stanza also personifies the waves now angry but the daisies are out of their reach and they are again beat up by a merciless wind that leaves them to die. What we see as sad, unfair, mean is merely nature and its survival of the fittest and evolution that strengthens the species spreading the strongest seeds. I like many others was a victim of bullying when young and it made me stronger when I learned to stand up and fight back. The bullies became good friends in the face of adversity just as I now am friends with the wind and the waves, they are my brothers and the world once wild is now unified. A lovely write that at first inspires pity but can be seen through other eyes,

[Marie]

Dear Soren, gratitude for your wondrous and amazing insightful review of this poem. I have no words to thank you, but hope that you will accept my deepest and most humble acknowledgement. You have shown me a way previously unknown to me, in which the poem may be viewed. For that, I am indebted to you, dear poet...

[Soren]

I thank you for your wonderful poems. Poetry to me is a way to see life through different eyes and your lines offer a wonderous view on life itself.

[Marie]

Thank you for your so kind and gracious comment, dear poet...

[Dpoet]

Amazing!know I know I wasn't wrong to go through your marvelous art,the rhyme is perfect the message is divine,...I absolutely love everything!keep going and sharing,Dpoet

[Marie]

Thank you for reading and for your very encouraging review, dear poet...