Maze of Life...

Life is always changing.

While living in the maze of life. Nothing is clear nothings nice.

Mind frozen stiff on ice… I feel as if I lost my wife.

 

Mind confused out of touch and in pain…

Knowledge gained, I must retain.

 

How am I to grow if every step I take, I just hear no!

I no longer know which way to turn, which way to go…

 

In this maze I amaze while in a daze…

Up I slowly gaze, to see the falling rays.

Too many ways and not enough days.

 

Forward I must continue to move.

For what I’ve lost I did not choose.

 

To gain again I must move on.

In the dark, let us wait until the dawn…

 

In this maze of life, nothing nice nothing clear.

My way to the unknown is what I most fear…

 

11/21/08 -San

12/31/12- Sansee

 

 

Author's Note

ignore grammar problems, what do you think of the dialogue, etc.

Reviews

[Nautili]

I like the way your mind works. I know you are going thru a difficult time right now, but looking forward to see you broaden from this topic of lost love and take that passion into other topics. Transfer it, if you will. Then you can use all that tempestuous creativity for so much more than your heart-ache, although those poems are relatable as well.

[Aspiring Angel]

Looking and moving forward is always the best path to take. Not always the easiest but the best. Blessings to you along your path.

Hugs,
Lesa

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

This was very good

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[Amanda]

in this life, the paths are always open...it is the path we chose, that is what is important. indecision, uncertainty, and yes, fear, always make it so that we cannot move forward. you have to believe in yourself for starters...that is what i have come to realize and it is never easy to find the path that you must take.

i wish you luck in your search and the wisdom to know when you have found it.

Amanda

[Kenneth Lopez]

As I gaze at this writing I'm amazed and enlightened, A true meaning of life, with all the paths one must smite and ignore for one being to move forward and move toward true meaning this writing is screaming to the soul of the giver, forgivers and those who have lived it.

True poetry�

10/10

- Storyteller

[cyanskye]

you have done a nice job letting the tellers voice be heard. It is easy to feel the anxiety over choices and change. I especially love the last stanza and how you incorporated the phrases from the beginning.

[Legion]

Okay, not to be cruel here or unkind, but I would like to see what you could do without all the forced rhyme. I have actually read several of your pieces and find this is occurring quite often in your writing. It is okay to rhyme, just don't make it so typical. Strain and stretch yourself in what you write and how you write it. You have some very cool ideas, but the presentation kills your ambition. I think you could do much better with time and practice. Something that might help (something I did many years ago that helped me) is to acquire a dictionary and a thesarus. Write out what you want to say and then use the two to enhance what you have written. This will not only improve your immediate piece, but also help strengthen your vocabulary for future pieces. Another thing is to read as much stuff from others as you can to broaden your horizons on topics (which you really don't seem to have a problem with) and to expand your knowledge in writing styles and the linguistics of it. A couple of pieces I have written somewhat on this topic may help you understand more of what I am talking about. They are "Quantity vs. Quality" and "On Writing Love Poems". Anyway, don't give up and keep on writing. Will check out more of your writings soon. Ciao.

[Alias Fletcher]

I like this piece. The phrase "Mind frozen stiff in ice�" is a familiar feeling of fear that faces us all as we confront the unknown. Yet the poet knows, "Forward I must continue to move. For what I've lost I did not choose." that he must not give up. He must go on. And this is a great truth. Thanks keep writing. Charly

[darkgurl]

You know this is quite true,

In this maze I amaze while in a daze�
Up I slowly gaze, to see the falling rays�
Too many ways and not enough days�

Love these lines here, This is wonderful, you know you have wonderful talent.....Kim

[Conversations Kill]

I love how you started strong, the flow is great. In my opinion third verse should be stronger or removed altogether. Great piece :)