Fear, failure... Regret

I feel alone...

With passion and fire in my heart, the flames of life have burned my heart to ashes.

I now feel empty inside… I feel numb to all feeling within touch.

The voices heard are far and unclear. Whispers of words all seem foreign.

Am I now blinded by this over whelming pain? Nothing seems clear ahead…

I have traveled this road before. It is a lonely one. Only the wind in heard for miles.

I stop far and away from all, and listen to the trees move in the wind.

The cold gentle breeze soothes my face. Not enough to take the burning away.

It slowly begins to rain. A mist begins to rise… I am wet in a pool of emotion.

So now I stand alone, alone in the dark... Cold shivering within regret.

 

Reviews

[Paza]

this was heart-wrenching to read...so much darkness and desperation...

"Whispers of words all seem foreign"

an inspired choice of words that convey to me the feeling that nothing is making sense...that communication has totally broken down...i've recently had a feeling like this, where i've been trying to tell someone how i feel, but they just aren't getting it, and what they are saying back, makes no sense at all...i really liked this.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

A poem so many can relate to .. heartfelt.. pain and sorrow ..wet in a pool of emotion is a very good line ... nice poem though dark and lonely..

Chloe
xoxo

[O!]

This could be a one-man play which would get a standing ovation!

This gave me goosebumps....I actually heard and felt the emotion!

Very nicely done....

x,
O!

[Steve Thompson]

A tough/truth in these words...hard to swallow it all, but very interesting, and very true

[JudyC]

The voices heard are far and unclear. Whispers of words all seem foreign.

A vivid description of the disorienting effect of pain. This poem appeals to the senses, drawing in the reader. At the end, I could feel the mist on my face. Well done.

[darkgurl]

Such a heartwrenching write but wonderfully expressed.....Kim

[Adelia Alighieri]

Nice work...I like your expressions and the way you created an atmosphere.

[Rain]

Loneliness can create such a hollow feeling. You do a nice job of making the reader feel that void. Nice write. Rain..

[Liza]

i admire the words chosen to express the moment of darkness, the burning out of all the fire that lead to pain.

it's poetic how the rain came at the end to neutralize the ashes....

although we don't like to hear it, pain makes us feel alive, makes us appreciate what we had or lost....pain can even inspire creativity like this poem....

[Rhine Wolf]

life can be so cruel!

"It slowly begins to rain. A mist begins to rise� I am wet in a pool of emotion."

for me this was the defining line of the poem, all that emotion and no vessel to hold it in. brilliant!!

Blessed be'
Fallon

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

The burning pain of heartbrake. Very well done