My heart bleeds...

It's odd how as a writer or an artist expressions come more often when full of joy or overwhelmed in pain... As I wrote this today 11/13/08 time 3:33 pm I saw this writing before in a dream...Dejavu?

   

You know how I feel yet you do nothing to stop the bleeding…

Many nights alone wondering why things became as they are…

 

All my life, all I’ve known, hard times.

So I become these hard rhymes…

 

I thought this time would be it. With you in life, I would share this trip.

Now I see you always had other plans. This whole time I thought, I was your man.

I was wrong, so I must go. That I'm not strong I will not show...

So within these moving sands I sink. And I’ll be gone before you blink.

My love for you is truly real. Time and again I’ve expressed how I feel.

This has never been enough… It all makes sense with your words so rough.

I knew it then, I refused to see. The gravity of love was holding me.

 

To look and begin again, strikes up my fear.

That it all seems true I lost the one I held near.

 

So I search for calm, I search for peace.

Looking at my hands and palms, while on my knees…

 

Oh God won’t you help me please?

-Sanee 12-31-12

Reviews

[Destiny]

"I knew it then, I refused to see. The gravity of love was holding me."

This line stood out to me because it's so true for so many people. I unfortunately am one of them. You know something is wrong, but it's much easier to pretend your paranoid or being over dramatic then to admit to yourself it's not working. I think this poem expresses that first crack in a bad break-up. Denial. And unfortunately that single emotion makes the rest that much more intense. I enjoyed you insight here. Even in retrospect we need to be reminded of the past to keep us strong in the future.
Thanx for writing.
♥Destiny♥

[Elzereth]

Another beautiful and emotional poem. I ended up reading over it twice.

"I knew it then, I refused to see. The gravity of love was holding me."

I definitely say that this was my favorite line. I have to agree with what Destiny said about it and I have been through that myself. It is the most horrible feeling in the world and causes a feeling of helplessness. You did a wonderful job.

[Midnyte]

This would be a beautiful spoken word. I can imagine a man who was so lost in emotion, so angry with life and love as it is, so wounded they are untrusting, lashing out in the most sinful of ways to soothe their soul. Sometimes there is no help, only unanswered questions that plague the soul as the head lays upon the pillow late at night. Tears seem hollow and shallow compared to the rawness of reality. You have a way with words that is not only beautiful but heart wrenching enough to paint an image of abstract means. I can only hope to be as artistic when my pen is placed into rhythm. Thank you for sharing and allowing me to, once again, visualize what I take from it and assume what you may mean.

[Kia]

Wow...this was really emotional...and I truly know how it feels. This feeling makes you wonder if there is anyone out there you can truly share your life with. Well written..i LOVED IT

[Wycked]

you have done a great job of capturing the anguish. I like this part:

So I search for calm, I search for peace.
Looking at my hands and palms, while on my knees

Its were (in a relationship) you just let go, there is nothing else you can do. There's nothing left but to move on.

~Wycked~

[Ashli Nicole]

This is absolutely positively amazing.
I can totally relate to this one. You did a great job.

"To look and begin again, strikes up my fear.
That it all seems true I lost the one I held near."

I love that! The whole thing was great. Thanks. :)

[darkgurl]

Now this is a write here, It can stand all on it's won as powerful much inspired by this piece

All my life all I've known, hard times�
So I become these hard rhymes�

These words here grabbed me, Well said and well stated......Kim

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

i can so relate to this on so many levels... i hate being pulled along until they get done with you and then they just let you go

[Rhine Wolf]

so sad, so heart felt. i felt the sinking into the sand, as if you where willing the earth to open up and drown your pain out, never close your heart, for love to come again it needs an open vessel to fill.

loved the flow and the format was rather pleasing too.

Blessed be,
Fallon

[Tina Kline]

A very sad poem, I can feel your pain and
desperation, the wanting love from someone
and not getting it. The pain comes through
this poem and yet it is beautifully written as
well. I really like it.

Tina