Broken

So aggravated...

Another crush ruined 

by another girl 

that I barely know. 

I told a guy 

that I like him.

And I got the 

Same answer 

That I always 

get:

"I only like

you as a 

friend..."

I can't tell you 

how many times

I've heard that.

The girl he likes,

yeah, I guess 

she's alright.

But, I've heard 

That she's cheated on boyfriends......

I hope he's careful......

Reviews

[ThIsDaRkRoAdToNoWhErE]

This is such an awesome piece!! I can pretty much relate, cause my ex had cheated on me. I did everything for her, and i mean everything that i could do. And when i found out what she did, pft, God, just no words or emotions could describe what i felt. Ugh, and the guy she's with now...Ugh, omg...that's another story right there lol. But i totally felt this tho, it was great. Great job with it! :)

[Wandering Violet]

Nice! I like the broken lines structure, very effective.

[Sophie]

As promised, your review:
I loved this, I don't quite understand the structure, but then again I never do haha. I can completely relate to this, its like you read my mind and thats a great aspect to have in a poem. my favorite stanza is "The girl he likes,
yeah, I guess
she's alright."
Great write!

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awwwww. The frustration of telling someone how you feel...
I love the emotions expressed here. It is saddening when the guy doesn't always feel the same.. -sigh- the agony.. of love..
This is really good!
Nice job!

[Wolfwind]

I think I've lived through and survived the gender reversal of these words a dozen times over the years. Your words convey well the frustration and the concern. Well done!

Aaron