Fredyman,
In these first two of your poems I've read and reviewed, there run social messages throughout, with a philosophical bent, and much is emphasized about straightening one's thinking (attitude ?) about life and where, how we live … it, also, speaks deeply about you (the man), of the environment where and how you live, but most of all, it reveals the fine man you've become and keep striving to be.
I very much like and respect your messages.
For rhymes, you really need to work of their accuracy, and grammar, too, with a stronger poetic voice your fine work demands, in order that it becomes the powerful piece it deserves to be … explore more creative, original ways to express your ideas/ideals.
I think the site is lucky to have you as a member, and I know you will prosper and learn a lot here if you make many friends, and read and review all you can … there are some talented artists and excellent poetry here, and some not so much, but you'll soon learn which is what. : )
An excellent effort, Fredyman, with a fine potential … thank you for sharing! ⁓ Richard
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Man your review is always helpful, I think i should try to research on how to be more expressive and.. read moreMan your review is always helpful, I think i should try to research on how to be more expressive and accurate. thank you
Fredyman,
In these first two of your poems I've read and reviewed, there run social messages throughout, with a philosophical bent, and much is emphasized about straightening one's thinking (attitude ?) about life and where, how we live … it, also, speaks deeply about you (the man), of the environment where and how you live, but most of all, it reveals the fine man you've become and keep striving to be.
I very much like and respect your messages.
For rhymes, you really need to work of their accuracy, and grammar, too, with a stronger poetic voice your fine work demands, in order that it becomes the powerful piece it deserves to be … explore more creative, original ways to express your ideas/ideals.
I think the site is lucky to have you as a member, and I know you will prosper and learn a lot here if you make many friends, and read and review all you can … there are some talented artists and excellent poetry here, and some not so much, but you'll soon learn which is what. : )
An excellent effort, Fredyman, with a fine potential … thank you for sharing! ⁓ Richard
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Man your review is always helpful, I think i should try to research on how to be more expressive and.. read moreMan your review is always helpful, I think i should try to research on how to be more expressive and accurate. thank you