I Kill

I Kill

A Poem by Freder Fredersen (aka Grady)
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unfortunate power of negative emotional response and the ensuing guilt

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Kill
 
I kill things that sing purity and hope
I just peer down the scope and open fire
Heaven falls when I punch through the wall
And her tears burn small holes in the carpet
 
My existence explodes and tension grows
In flowering bursts of awkward silence
I fear what I’ve done, and lower my gun
And I survey the violent wreckage
 
She has not been harmed, but her trembling arms
Hug her soft frame, and shame slams my conscience
There’ll be no flesh-scars, but deeper, she’s marred,
And her sweet smile lies dead in the hallway
 
I kill things that sing purity and hope
I deserve a noosed rope and an oak tree
Desolate, damned; “wretched man that I am”
My worthlessness echoes the universe  
 
4/2009
(sick / listening to a couple argue)

 

© 2009 Freder Fredersen (aka Grady)


Author's Note

Freder Fredersen (aka Grady)
Laugh out loud in public....set a good example.

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It only takes a second of rage for life to come tumbling down- Love the line-And her sweet smiles lies dead in the hallway-he killed his purity and hope- The next time I'm about to argue with my wife- I'll take pause think about this poem and then instead of yelling I'll give her a kiss- damn good poetry


my warmest
bob

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Love this perspective, how you take on his voice, make him a killer of hope and purity and then a pile of shame that he didn't know his own power to create wreckage and despair. I can't tell definitively if you realized this or he did. It doesn't matter. Very vivid and true. I like your note as commentary too.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this, i can feel the rage and anger, a tight anger i should say, you write and express yourself well. As far as Love, It stinks at times, sometimes it's all roses. The world was built on love but where is it really? I like this write, great penned out emotions.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

It only takes a second of rage for life to come tumbling down- Love the line-And her sweet smiles lies dead in the hallway-he killed his purity and hope- The next time I'm about to argue with my wife- I'll take pause think about this poem and then instead of yelling I'll give her a kiss- damn good poetry


my warmest
bob

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 13, 2009

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Freder Fredersen (aka Grady)
Freder Fredersen (aka Grady)

Cleveland, TX



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