RAndomNISSS

random thoughts

their are so many lines unwritten
so many love songs already sung
fill me in and sing me to sleep
forget tieing it together and all the loose ends
ill color this in once you love me



Ill drink untill you hate me
and cut my hair short enough for you to save your two cents
cash in on your next victim
you made me strong enough now



Being scared of the night
made more sense
now the dark feels lonely



Ill take my pill and shine a light in my eye
their reflection has never been blacker
Bloody hands from bloody knuckles
a trail behind from burning rubber
and i smell it
itll fade
along with black and blue knees



We used to wanna dance on bars,
but now you say thats not what life is about



green knees and broken crayons



Facing the wall
but watching the cast of shadows
from passing cars

Author's Note

this is just some thoughts i wrote down over time in my journal.

Reviews

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I LOVE THE CHANGES YOU MADE!!!! WONDERFUL! Keep it up, darling ;-) This piece takes on entirely new meaning! I'll write more when I get a few moments ;-) ~ Many goodnights! - Nancy

[Todd Rose]

I really like this a lot. I love the imagery you've created in the poem, the way the words flow, especially the part about being scared of the dark making more sense. I always like the way you used color in your poem. In line with that, have you thought about perhaps putting the word "blacker" in bold? That would seem to be inline with the rest of your poem. Of course, it's only a suggestion. All in all, I thought this was a really great poem. Keep up the good work!