Why So Complex?

Although burning passion burns

Brighter than the blinding sun

The passion is for what was said,

what goes unsaid, in uninspired

fightless love.

The passion found in our endless happiness,

In predetermined, merit-less love.

Why so complex?

Pendant les temps nouveaux

To let go...of everything,

For ultimate distraction, that Pleasure

The meds, the stress, the preoccupations

Why so complex?

Ashamed of admitting,

my amorous faults and prerequisites

of renaissance and the impossibility

of ultimate distraction.

Dear, I am in no doubt

our dramatic display carries no illusion.

Outside forces obliterating my desire,

burdening with thoughts the beast that used to be.

Creating an obsession, with the meds, the stress, the preoccupations

Creating an obsession, with not letting go.

Blocking all desire...

Why so complex?

Persuasions carry no promise,

Caresses lend no spark of pleasure.

The endless euphoria

of self-acceptance, of letting go,

for ultimate distraction,

Why so complex, this letting go?

Why so complex, freeing myself

into your ultimate distraction?

The meds, the stress, the preoccupations...

Author's Note

my first poem in a long time. Please give some criticism on the clarity, the wording and the title. I didn't pay much attention to structure. Any ideas are welcome :)

Reviews

[T.W. Early]

There are great lines in this piece. why DOES everything have to be complex?

[Sehkmet]

This was a neat find, I love the atmosphere and structure. Even though i read most writes at the same distance with my eyes, this one seemed much more closer to my mind. well done

[Kyle]

I am happy to state that this maintained my attention throughout. :0). Too often my attention wanders on somewhat longer writes. I like the subtle romantic undertones.

[Tate Morgan]

Francesca very nice

[Time.]

You have alot of skill,
I could see what you mean about structure...
but heres a tip.. "Who cares" - I don't pay attention to structure either.
I just sorta let it flow, how it goes. This was a wonderful peace. :))

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a writer. The poem is beautiful. I like the emotion and the desire in your words.
"Ashamed of admitting,
my amorous faults and prerequisites
of renaissance and the impossibility
of ultimate distraction."
The language made me read the poem a second time. I like the way you made your point in this amazing poem.
Coyote

[knowman]

The poem is almost gothic, well said and a good write.

[An owl on the moon]

This is such a rich dark place you create.. that deep drug-induced place in the mind that cannot hope to hide from pain.. things cling and linger on from yesterdays... I found myself falling into that world.. unable to escape the shadows. Stunning.