` Longstem Promises`

 

 

 

There's no entitlement in life other than your name on a birth certificate

The system spreads you like putty over a thin surface turning you upside down;

then saturates your every move with man made rules and longstem promises.

 

 They comfort and caress you like a bedspread

 pretending they have you covered just incase you

mess up yet another time, telling you to " just be patient  these things take time "

 

 Consequently you wait for results hoping to see the glass half full once more

It never happens to turn out in your favor anyway; although you're

infatuated on a postive note with the idea that ` hey maybe this time it will be different.... but they have the upper hand, the preeminence to say how it's going to play out.

 

You finally realize you're just the poor peon that is left toiling in the daily grind etching out a living as they squeeze life's blood until you have no more to give, then made to feel contrite and end up doing penitence for their BS!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. I could discuss and agree with lines of this poem. I like all the strong statements. The ending is my favorite.
"as they squeeze life's blood until you have no more to give"
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Fire Mage Andrea]

good strong emotive stuff

[paul]

reads like my autobiography

[BryanaBear]

I love the views expressed, great job. Keep on writing!

[Mysteriousmaniac]

I may not totally agree with what you're saying here, but it is a very powerful and beautiful poem nonetheless. Thank you for the read. ;)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Boy that last stanza really spoke to me... for someone who is on his 17th straight day working and not sure when he will see a day off I can totally relate.

[FireWoman]

For the most part, we are all in the same boat. So many privileged people walk on our backs and seem to be able to behave abhorantly and thrive. I (must) believe that they will have to sit in front of that giant movie screen and not only watch but EXPLAINtheir life. One misstep at a time.

I liked the way this flowed into the gem it became.

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now that was bittersweet..the opening line set the tone and played out like a symphony of sarcasm..

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the electric currents of wicked clever delivarence coil bittersweetly from your poetic snake charmer~ we are tools for the elite~ given the illusion of attainable wealth by the wealthy~ that should be a clue right their lol~ you have delivered the most subtle slice of the sharpest bittersweet pie known to us within this greedy blind society of hollow promises~