^ PULSE ^

 

In vibrant visions of streets gone mad
beats the pulse of entrapment
Is it heaven
or is it hell?
no one knows; no one can tell

And the pulse it has ground control
powered through lights of a 5th dimension
with fingers, pointing, pointing!
in all directions, it divides; then multiplies
beyond anyone's comprehension
subliminal thoughts of wild intention
lending its knowledge of mass confusion

 

And where do all the people go?
before and after present footsteps
pounding soiled pavement
needing no down payment
to purchase and possess
this big bright mess of urban decay

 

And it's still there, still there!
following with its sneaky infusion
below the threshold of their awarness
and the pulse, it beats on, beats on, beats on....

Reviews

[Devons]

There is electricity running through this poem just like that which feeds the neon lights of the cityscape. But it depicts the illumination in terms of the superficial materialist culture it represents, and the dazzling tawdriness which camouflages what's hidden beneath.
These opening lines are excellent:
"In vibrant visions of streets gone mad
beats the pulse of entrapment"
I really like that, it captures the entire essence of the piece with impact from the start. In fact, I would have been tempted to call the poem "The Pulse Of Entrapment", but that's a matter of opinion...
And a close second for favourite lines is:
"to purchase and possess
this big bright mess of urban decay"
A very good piece, with an equally good thematic interpretation of the image, bringing it to life and meaning.

[Confuser]

Oh I loved it! Fran you are just a very good writer! Bam, I read it aloud and laughed - I loved it; every single word. What great imagination! Thank you. Dale

[Fran Marie]

Many thanks Dale.glad you enjoyed

[Confuser]

Y/W..........................think I put it in library, if not I am...wowzer.

[Daydreamer]

Epitome of the city's surroundings demonstration! I enjoyed a lot coming across this today!!!🎇🎆🎇🎆🎇🎆

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Manal so much, glad you enjoyed,

[AprilRN1210]

This one is definitely different than what I am used to reading from you girl.. I liked it!.. it had my brain working in overdrive trying to keep up with the beat... some of the phrasing and descriptions in this are just brilliant and so true.. pretty amazing stuff here!... :)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks April,I so very much appreciate your reviews.

[Rob Santana]

sssheesh!!! Full of adrenaline in this one. awesome job.

[*** Hey Jude***]

"Your beat" plays on marvelously within the wisdom of this thought provoking narration. ~ Well done! ~

[Archia]

So I'm not really sure that I get what this is about but I still thought it was great, and I feel like there's something deep in there. I loved just the whole feel this had to it, it was fast and strong, but then there was something more.

[Poeticadia]

This poem really captures 'this big bright mess of urban decay' and the rush, the chaos and the confusion people accept as their everyday urban lives as it all pulses around them, driving them mad "below the threshold of their awareness". It becomes their dependency and their 'entrapment'. The repetition heightens the feeling of pulse, heartbeat and obsessional dependency. I really enjoyed this.

[emmajoy]

The craziness of city life, if it can be called a life! This storms through all the things I hate most about urban living .. the speed, the noise, the artificial lights .. 'no time to stand and stare', to think or dream .. no time to see the stars and climb aboard.

It's just dawned on me.. reading a second time - I wonder if any of your people are conscious of what's going on around them, are they locked in their own words to protect themselves ?

Your words always create atmosphere, in this piece of epic writing you've added to the confusion with amazingly well placed words and phrases, ' it divides; then multiplies ~ beyond anyone's comprehension ~ subliminal thoughts of wild intention ~ lending its knowledge of mass confusion '

[Poetic Beauty]

The description is in depth and I can picture this scene in my mind. Crowded busy streets filled with people walking down a busy city center with lights that block out the stars in the sky. The details are fantastic and allow me to see what you are seeing.