`Spinning`

Dream your dream come with me to utopia where shangrila awaits with Venus Stir your senses to Saturn skies one step away from heaven' gate leading to Nirvana Dip your desires in Neptune's sea succomb to sublime bliss drenched in paradise Chart your course spinning thoughts in rapid force calming everchanging breathing winds of Mercury Summon the stars lighting the fires of the universe striking an iron sword conquering Mars Taste the temptation from dawn to dusk in morning's sun and magic night's moon sweet ambrosia on Earth Possess the power to break free those binds of restraint unleashing chains of Uranus Scheme the scene take the chance let luck be familiar in mystical themes of Jupiter Ride your rhythm savoring flavor of forbidden fruits where no rules apply you and I spinning in Pluto

Reviews

[Quaddeth]

The most substantial part of this poem for me is the freedom present, the ability to flow from one stanza to another with ease, it satisfies me to a certain extent. The use of the solar system alongside the freedom fuels it further and allows us to create an image of our utopian idealised vision of space, what is it to truly dream?

Thanks for the great read.

[Onyx_Rayne]

Such awe inspiring visuals, with this piece...

The structure and flow are perfect. And incorporating the planets into this write - very creative.

I enjoyed every celestial syllable - Fantastic write :)

[Wicahpi]

This is wonderful!
giggling at "do I have to pack a bag"
I was thinking, "do I have to pack a lunch" hahaha
but then, forbidden fruits... who needs a lunch! :)

[sammyj]

do I have to pack a bag? lol. no seriously, this is good, very good.

[An owl on the moon]

Beautiful write that takes us on a vast journey across time and space. Wondrously expressed and deeply moving. Loved the freedom and passion found in your words.

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well metered poem with a light touch and written with such imagination.