Living Hell

Life is just a living hell

    but I survived

         and learned it well

 

 

The sword in my hand

   burns for life's fiery glow

           a plight I understand

 

     

My strength will not pause

    nor tear one layer below

         but I'll carry on with a cause

 

 

No one takes the wind from my sail

  I'll stand up and hold my own

       too many have tried only to fail

 

 

 Fires and smoke don't bother me

      I've learned to exhale

                  actually, quite easily

 

 

 

yeah, yeah, I know you think me mad

     but never have I seen more clearly

         everyday surroundings bring news that's bad

 

 

                    Life is just a living hell

                          but I survived

                                 and learned it well

 

        

Reviews

[Clockwork]

It seemed a little like the speaker in this piece was holding something back, maybe a scrap of wisdom of the others of her society. This aspect of the piece reminds me a little of W.H Auden's If I Could Tell You.

Overall this one shines best when the speaker talks of the sword in her hand, and I like that stanza most.

[Wicahpi]

Awesome tale of survival in this great big world.
I wish I learned it well! lol

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the fiery heroine who is her own knight in shining armor takes life by the hilt~ !!!~ excellent~ much enjoyed!!!~ and thank you for your submission in the contest!~ =)~
Selene

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The sword in my hand
burns for life's fiery glow
a plight I understand


experience is our best teacher in life... and those of hardship and pain are the ones that strengthen our spirits.

[Ladysue]

I really like this...you did well with this....a strong write...

[Abdul Aziz]

Very good job! The structure really helps in getting your point across.
It is made clearly, with simplicity, albeit with angst.

Very good job.

[deeps]

Life is just a living hell
but I survived
and learned it well

This is wonderful words here, I like this wriite alot.
amazing write. Valuable lesson as well.

[Nicole Renee]

This was really good!