Living Hell

Life is just a living hell

    but I survived

         and learned it well

 

 

The sword in my hand

   burns for life's fiery glow

           a plight I understand

 

     

My strength will not pause

    nor tear one layer below

         but I'll carry on with a cause

 

 

No one takes the wind from my sail

  I'll stand up and hold my own

       too many have tried only to fail

 

 

 Fires and smoke don't bother me

      I've learned to exhale

                  actually, quite easily

 

 

 

yeah, yeah, I know you think me mad

     but never have I seen more clearly

         everyday surroundings bring news that's bad

 

 

                    Life is just a living hell

                          but I survived

                                 and learned it well

 

        

Reviews

[Clockwork]

It seemed a little like the speaker in this piece was holding something back, maybe a scrap of wisdom of the others of her society. This aspect of the piece reminds me a little of W.H Auden's If I Could Tell You.

Overall this one shines best when the speaker talks of the sword in her hand, and I like that stanza most.

[Lyn Anderson]

I have always been impressed by your subtle, effective and unforced rhyme and skillful presentation. It does feel somewhat restrained, like there's something in between

[Shikon Akuma Ookami]

I love how poetic and well this poem flows. You did a great job in putting emotions into words and describes a strength I can't quiet explain. Over all a great joy to read.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Shimon... S o vey much for the review on my poem.much appreciated..glad you enjoyed

[Aly]

Very nice I can relate very well everyone goes through s**t and you have to learn to make the best of it

[carolh]

I like the gutsy feeling of this and the imagery.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I don't think you are mad...like its stated in the write... lol. I think this is a great poem. Well penned.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Danny, ever so much..

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome:)

[E G TEN]

Hello Fran, I had always admire them lady heroine like the
Ones you had beautifully depicted in here at the start and then
And then switch it to a modern-day Warrior Mom who has to
Face each duties and responsibilities as today's heroine!
Nicely done.

Everyone votes, so I guess I can review candidly.

[Fran Marie]

Many thanks, E.G., for reading and for the review on my poetry..glad you enjoyed..

[Rick Puetter]

Nice one, Fran. Like the repeat of the first stanza at the end. Yes, some of us seem to survive and learn. Easy to tell who those people are when you meet them.

Best regards,

Rick

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Rick;. I so appriciate your reading and review on my poetry..

[Rick Puetter]

Again, my pleasure!

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

This is a very awesome poem. Loved the resilience this exudes.

My strength will not pause
nor tear one layer below
but I'll carry on with a cause

[Fran Marie]

thanks so much, SpeedyH; for reading and reviewing my poetry;

[December Blaize]

The speaker in this poem seems very wise, like they have gained a new understanding of life and its trials. I like how you used the beginning stanza at the end, it really wraps the whole poem together. This is an amazing, powerful poem.

[White Ink]

" Life is just a living hell

but I survived

and learned it well"


I just love this stanza, this poem is wise n well written. Congratulations for winning 9th place in "Life has taught me contest". Love it!