Moonlight Shadows

 

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Moonlight shadows sneak across a velvet sky
  as midnight catches me watching and wondering why
it seems to override my days as well
  these sinister shadows sent from hell
 
Haunting my dreams since whence I was born
  this dreadful darkness won't leave me alone
 trying to reach stars shinning bright
  searching a new moon of hope and light
 
Yet moonlight shadows always stay
  each new dawn and breaking day
 I cannot break this damning curse
  neverending evil at its deadly work
 
Demons and angels fight for my soul
   and I fear the demons are gaining control.
 
 
 
 

Reviews

[Kayla]

That was AWESOME!!! My favorite piece of work that you've written!! I could picture everything in my mind, vividly!! It sends chills down my spine!! And it is so true because everyone has their inner wars everyday. When we decide to do this or that. Doctors have decide whose lives to save. So many hard choices that we ourselves must make. Anyways, my favorite part of you poem was the last part "Demons and angels fight for my soul and I fear the demons are gaining control." That was just un-freaken-believable!! Congrats on one of the most amazing writes I have ever read!!

[CountNicholasAlti]

I'm a sucker for poems in regards to darkness and that use imagery of the moon. I do enjoy the mystery behind this piece and the impending atmosphere that you created. It is also aesthetically pleasing and flows well. That opening line is fantastic.

[Fran Marie]

thanks for reviewing my poetry tonight;

[Voice]

All I can say is…PERFECT! I can relate to this poem as well. Great write!!

Voice

[Shalini Dinesh]

a very beautiful poem, smooth flow, the words take control of this poem so well...

[THE LOST ROSE]

This was great! For the writing contest just had you over the first place title now. Standing O my dear standing "O".

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Whoa... Spectacular! 100/100

[Aggie Skeleton]

Frickin Awsome. Loved how you rymed, I don't see many who do.

[Poet's World]

Its really a fantastic poem and it was like reading a golden poetry written in earlier days, it has got a beautiful feel that paints the picture in the readers mind..... nice write, enjoyed reading it....

[there is no more from m..]

an amazing poem well done :)

[MagiCrystal]

One thing...I will fight for your soul..and I m no demon only a human with the soul of a poet.. I love it.. your are superb

[Buddhistboy73]

Hi Fran Marie.
This is beautiful. I feel the spirit behind it. And you are one of only a few that bother to change the font + do something different with it. Enjoyed it....