Edge of Destiny

She grieves A lover's Death

 

 

 

I stand on the edge of  destiny

   my heart's vessel tattered and torn

Oh, what good am I ,without thee?

   'tis a sad sorrow my soul doth mourn

 

 

Haunting night winds softly speak your name

  in chilling whispers from beyond

and my mind's insynch with death's cold, cold pain

  ne'er shall I see a bright new dawn

 

 

If I cried one Ive cried a thousand tears

  and a weight breathes heavy upon my breast

Each day is mundane without you dear

  and I feel as tho~ I have nothing left

 

 

Oh that  heavens would smile 'pon thee

   and open hell's dark dreary tomb

bringing you back to life and me

   nevermore a lonely spirit to roam

 

 

'Tis this very night I feel a phantom's presence

  your hands go right thru~ me like ghosts

and walls fluidly lifting my soul

  and the scent of your manly essence,I miss the most

 

 

In the still of darkness I let go of your love words to me

   poetry verses you once wrote with desire

now scattered  to a sullen midnight breeze

   'tis now dead matter without life's fire

 

 

O' slowly,ever slowly in death's vapors I am caught

     in  loneliness and misery mine eyes at twilight weep

my life, my love, is all for naught

     for your ghostly form lives on in shadows deep

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

A gothic type love lost to death

Reviews

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… this is an epic verse that echoes and echoes and echoes … the rhyme and the language take it to a whole new level of intensity and darkness … the black might of death … the feeling of being bereft … the biting pain of loss … the melancholy of desolation and misery when a paramour departs … leaving behind the haunting alleys of vacant time … this is moving and yet magical poetry at its stunning best … exceptionally well written …

… the title is sheer genius … “edge of destiny” … for it is nothing but at the edge of destiny that death awaits us … “oh what good am i without thee” … the power of simple profundity resonates … expressing loss and expressing helplessness with earnestness … “haunting night winds” … “chilling whispers” … “death’s cold, cold pain” … again express with wizardry that intensity of excruciating pain that the death of a paramour brings … leaving the one alive in the dark depths of a distressing sorrow … “a thousand tears” … “a weight breathes heavy” … “each day is mundane” … “i have nothing left” … “a lonely spirit to roam” … express the brutal blow with extreme sensitivity and isolation … “a phantom’s presence” … “your hands go through me like ghosts” … “walls fluidly lifting my soul” … capture in a bewitching and enthralling way the experience of memories in a sense that transcends the emotional … making the experience almost physical … almost real … almost surreal … “poetry verses you once wrote with desire” … “now scattered to a sullen midnight breeze” … bring to life the longing and yearning experienced … the injury of loss … the pain of permanent separation … the echo of a dry and dark solitude … “in loneliness and misery mine eyes at twilight weep” … “my life, my love is all for naught” … “for your ghostly form lives on in shadows deep” … end this magnificently operatic verse that brings to life the mammoth proportions of the million sorrows that the loss of a paramour brings … this verse is a work of art … oil on canvas … in shades of grey … dark and bleak … yet etching the eternal exactitude of epic love with remarkable skill … and intense emotion … amazingly expressive, elegant and eloquent verse …

(serah)
(editor, the fourth dimension blog)

[Surrealstorm]

This was so beautiful. It was masterfully written and the emotions were so strong. It made me think about how i would feel if i lost my love. It completely took me in. Wonderful write!

[Cassandra D.]

This was a beautiful poem.

"I stand on the edge of destiny
my heart's vessel tattered and torn
Oh, what good am I ,without thee?
'tis a sad sorrow my soul doth mourn"

I enjoyed the descriptions of this poem. You've written this very well.
Such a wonderful piece.

[ICE]

This piece is beautifully done!

[Eric Cox]

A hauntingly written tragedy. Excellent writing. Great job on this.

[An owl on the moon]

This is so profoundly beautiful, haunting, and passionate. A love that truly never ends. You express such a depth of sorrow and pain through each vivid, moving line. Wonderful write in every way.

[deeps]

"If I cried one Ive cried a thousand tears
and a weight breathes heavy upon my breast
Each day is mundane without you dear
and I feel as tho~ I have nothing left"

Such powerful emotion you have penned here,
I really enjoyed this write, This is wonderful.
You never cease to amaze me with your talent.
This is an enjoyable read Fran!

[TamiViolet]

Tis very nice, Fran. A broken heart, lost love letters.....classic in theme and tone. The second stanza is my favorite though.

'Haunting night winds softly speak your name
in chilling whispers from beyond....'

I like that.

[Sheila Kline]

Oh my.....what an awesome gothic love poem! It is absolutely filled with vivid and beautiful imagery that literally leaves me gasping with awe!

Haunting, chilling and memorable!!

There are just too many amazing lines to pick a fav!