`Don't`

  
Don't try to save my soul
it's way too late now
The devil stole it long ago
I doubt you would even know how
 
 Don't try to mellow out my harden heart
can't you see it has turn to stone
an evil wind blew in ripping it apart
taking the marrow of my bone
 
Don't save me from my dark destiny
salvation waits not for me 'pon angel's wings
changing that~ which cannot be
'tis only midnight's dark eyes I see
 
Don't pity my tormented mind
I need no crying symphony
don't wipe these blood -drop eyes of mine
it's my liquid sound euphony
 
Don't try to make me want a life
can't you see Satan has shown me his face
I only wish I could end this strife; with bloody knife
and take myself out of the race.
 
 
 
 
 
 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Even tho your narrator speaks in a convincing way, I'm not convinced becuz this narrator sounds strong as nails and feisty as a survivor. I think this person is sick of people telling her/him how to live, so let them all think he/she is a basket case & please just write him/her off. Meanwhile, this narrator is living a happy wildish life free from those who pronounce upon others. But this could also be a powerfully written suicide poem to show how sometimes it can be just a thread holding someone back from ending it all (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Margie
you have such
a keen insight
when reviewing
poems and I
don't mean just
mine. I wrote
this 12 year's
ago some of
my old dark poetry
but no where near
suicide lol I
so appreciate
your keen reviews
on my work;

[Sean M. Addams]

wow... a dark and creepy write..liked the imagery in this alot...like the unholy tones of this... overall a very impressive piece fav lines...Don't pity my tormented mind
I need no crying symphony
don't wipe these blood -drop eyes of mine
it's my liquid sound euphony
...very nice!!!

[deeps]

Wow! Dark and powerful
Love this write Fran!
Very well written and so poetic.

[Geminair]

wow well written dark and potent,i can really relate to it too,talent like that should not be wasted!