DEath's SpiN

 

 

 

I'm caught in a death spin when I'm with you

   you bleed my soul in shades of red

Those dark, dark shades of crimson blood

    sins stained in scarlet fall 'pon my head

 

The web spins tightly securing our sacred creed

   my love you are to me the darkest light

your gothic love breeds the evil seed in me

   of lust and love on the blackest night

 

A red blood moon bleeds out our names

  and stars sink deeper down to a dull dark glow

speaking in a sapphire sky of wicked love untamed

   it's a dark serious love only chosen few know

 

        An underworld of your darken soul within

                a web of gothic love has me in death's spin

 

 

 

Reviews

[EILEEN McGUINNESS]

I loved the depravity and lust here the darkness of forbidden love the wonderful display of blood splattered affection really cuts through me like a knife through butter,as the darkness covers the two embrace in a midnight kiss and a werewolf can be heard in the distance before they transform from mortal humans to immortal dark angels on a pale blue night.

[Julia.Moore]

A love for haiku poetry began in college, inspired by its simplicity and depth. The book Blue Harlequin captures these moments beautifully. Read the full article to explore the essence of haiku poetry: https://aoidemagazine.com/what-is-haiku-poetry/

[Helen Crutchett]

A spine-chilling write Fran. Had me on the edge of my seat right to the end. Thank you for submitting this to my gothic contest!

Helena

[Raivenne]

Nice! I love how the physical words on the page (screen) almost seem to twist away as the depth of darkness deepens.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

my love you are to me the darkest light


Great line. Wow. It's like something I would hear in a song and put as my headline on myspace or something. Too cool. This poem kinda seems like a cliched dark poem to me. Too much talk of blood and darkness and the moon, but ya know... Gothic love: what was I expecting right?

Thanks for entering this into my contest. After you entered, I thought about it and decided that I only want the pieces to be about Valentine's after all, so feel free to take this one out of consideration and enter another. Just thought I would give you a heads up.

[Tina Kline]

Dark with splashes of crimson!
An erotic love poem of wild, untamed
and wicked love.

Great poem!

[Magdelena]

Fantastic fran!! Awesome job on this my gal! Loved so many lines for deep all were yet to pick my fav..

An underworld of your darken soul within

a web of gothic love has me in death's spin


Right there ya go.. That's what hit me in the middle and sank within my mind..
Loved it..


Mag xx

[Sean M. Addams]

like the imagery in this piece alot.... dark wicked love ... love this..... overall i thought this was an amazing write ... fav lines...A red blood moon bleeds out our names

and stars sink deeper down to a dull dark glow

speaking in a sapphire sky of wicked love untamed.... very nice!!!

it's a dark serious love only chosen few know

[deeps]

Awesome! Write here
This is amazing.

A red blood moon bleeds out our names
and stars sink deeper down to a dull dark glow
speaking in a sapphire sky of wicked love untamed
it's a dark serious love only chosen few know

Love these lines here, Awesome write Fran!