Killer's Lament

 

my heart is hollow; an empty shell
 
my eyes have wept a million tears
 
my soul is laden in lament
 
I exist in a demon's hell
 
from a past of sin
 
cast in iron cement
 
 
my love's face haunts my night dreams
 
my  gun still smells fresh of his spilt blood
 
my guilt consumes my thoughts it seems
 
I've no recourse
 
to repent
 
and slowly an island of misery is what I glean
 
 
my mind is gone and left
 
my memories; a blanket of gloom
 
my body way too long has slept
 
I cannot awake
 
nor can i escape
 
this terror of a killer's doom

 
 
 

Author's Note

Of course I offed him~ Killer that I am; lol

Reviews

[Sean M. Addams]

love the darkness in this alot ... the imagery in this leaps right out at you and pulls you in hard.... awesome job on this... fav lines..my love's face haunts my night dreams

my gun still smells fresh of his spilt blood

my guilt consumes my thoughts it seems

I've no recourse ............................................. awesome !!

to repent

and slowly an island of misery is what I glean

[barleygirl]

I really loved reading this. Whenever I'm reading something that's not straightforward, I get nervous becuz I'm not good at interpreting nuance. But in this case, your story is easy to follow & understand what's going on, even tho it's stated in slightly-subtle & misleading ways. Many original & well-crafted ideas: "iron cement" . . . "laden in lament" . . . & your final stanza is hauntingly desperate.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so much appreciated..glad you enjoyed

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like getting inside the head of killers...how they are haunted by what they did...and the question is raised....if they had it to do over again, would they do it again?

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Jacob so vey much for reading ;

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the deep look inside a murder's heart and mind. It makes me wonder why she killed her love and the misery is clearly portrayed. This is an amazing piece.

[Raja]

Wonderful! It is such a nice poem wherein People will feel strong with the deep sense of imagery.

Thank you.

Raja

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem tells a powerful story. Photo make words come alive. I like the feel of darkness and feeling of no escape from the past deeds. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[funeralmoon]

wow great job.. very morbid very good job with the imagery....

[Pookie]

I loved it. The picture was the start. It put a wonderful description in my mind. Thank you for putting it in my contest.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The haunting of past sins bring forth new evils in your life... you really know how to send chills down the readers spine.

[Rosa Sophia]

This is an interesting idea, but it would be nice if you added to it. Why is this person a killer? What did they do? Let's hear all the gory detail. It would make it a lot more fun to read.