Hello Darlin'

 

I've known men like you before, but by some strange token
you were quite different than the rest,an instant turn on.

Maybe it was your sexy mustashe or the cool style you projected or perhaps
the way your cigarette smoke curled into those little o' rings above
your thin lips.

Suddenly I began to realize I was falling for you.

What was I thinking? Had I taken leave of my senses?
My thoughts became tangled.

I was going into that silly gaga stage knowing darn well you'd
bring tears to my eyes, if we started our on and off affair once again.

That rainy night you pulled into town in your red corvette everyone knew
within the hour that you were back in town.

I knew at midnight when my telephone rang, call it intuition or whatever,

but I just knew it was you 

I didn't want to answer the call to hear the tall tales you most likey had to
tell, liar that you are.

I knew you were down at the old 730 cafe down on
Main St. soakin' up the booze and kickin' back with blusey songs.

Getting wasted again, runnin' up your bar tab and playing Mr.big shot!

You are such a con,
I Know how you are,first night back in town you have to tie one on.

But I couldn't resist the temptation.

My nerves were shot as I twiddled my thumbs
and paced around like a silly school girl, full of excitement
I rushed over to the phone on the wall and on the tenth ring I picked it up and said,
Hello Darlin'....




 

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

I absolutely loved this. I think most people have a person like this in their life. One that no matter how hard they try, no matter what they have put you through or the situation you are in, you will always pick up that phone, always want to hear their voice. I really liked how you set this up too. It is a story, but it is composed a bit like poetry, and the language says poetry as well. Really beautiful work my friend.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Ashira.,so very much appriciated

[mercy.just.breathe]

this is simply amazing. absolutely beautiful good job, you have an amazing heart. this is brilliant (:

[Lydia Shutter]

The person you hate to love....or love to hate. He has a magnetic pull on you although you know he is no good for you. Oh yes, we can all identify with this Fran Marie. There is an urgency to the connection in between the lines. Loved it. Lydi**

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Lydia, so very much Appriciated;

[cinel]

This is wonderful, i felt the drive while reading it, lovely.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so much..

[New Theory]

Irresistable, even when you know its bad. A very interesting take on being stuck in very few and beautiful lines.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so very much;

[Bright Ocean Star]

Fran, this one is oh, so familiar. The style was very free flowing and relaxed, almost prose-like story.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Star,I suppose it's prose poem tale

[Bright Ocean Star]

You did a great job with this. Thank you for sharing it with us. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

This is awesome. I don't know a woman who can't relate to this on some level, except maybe my mom, the woman's a saint. :)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks KL. :)

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Ohhhh, they're ALWAYS very alluring and perfect at first. I've had a few of those. Hindsight is 20/20 and all that

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so much

[jjwilbourne]

This was a really good piece of flash fiction. I felt anxious just reading it.

[Fran Marie]

thanks so much;

[C. Rose]

Congratulations!

This piece is a finalist of "Promote Me! IV"!

As a reward from Promote Me! IV, I have sent out 115 read requests for this piece.

Use the following link to vote before Oct. 15th 2014
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Promote-Me%21-IV-%28Not-Poetry%29/50253/

[Fran Marie]

Thanks C.Rose, so much appreciated;