Dancing Waters

 

dancing waters flow

    in deep whirling waves, sea winds

                       blow mist clouded tears

 

 

my way, as I see

   your shadow stepping nearer

              I cast liquid life

 

 

lines unto your feet

  enlightening your mind,soul

                   and heart, take the gift

 

 

of dancing waters~

           its electrifying charm 

                                I now offer you.

 

 

    

         

      

 

 

                      

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Fran.. your Art is blended with your poetry...
A Goddess of stormy waves where Souls collide...
The ebb and flow of of emotion against the
power of persuation when dancing and romancing...
Haiku's musical dance of Mermaid's Muse...
tenderly, Pat

[Fran Marie]

Haiku' s musical dance..like
the thought of that..thank you Pat

[Unspoken poet]

Love the movement of water and the way it ripples,
what a wonderful write Fran.

[Fran Marie]

Glad you liked it..
thanks Kimmie so much😊

[Einstein Noodle]

ok!!! i accept ;) nice theme in pic, title and poem .. a unity that precedes the theme .. she is a powerful force .. healing and enlightenment cups we all could use a sip from .. really like the salt mist tears .. such a simple and genuine comparison ... reminds me of the salt in our tears ... they may sting for a while when wounds are open .. beautiful imagery ... makes me yearn for your water lady ;)
E.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks E glad you enjoyed
I appreciate your kind words😊

[Chris Shaw]

The movement of water can be mesmerising. The power of water can be exhilarating. I love the imagery and the emotional feel I get from reading this series of Haiku. Well done Fran.

Chris

[Fran Marie]

Thank you Chris, so very much for your thoughts on this one..i appreciate

[Roland Petrov]

A chained haiku sequence; I love it! This isn't easy to do, and you've given us a stunning example. This entry in Mattalli's water haiku competition will probably blow the rest of us out of the water!

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Roland..like your witty review about being blown out of the water...I have extra liquid life lines..lol

[Lorraine]

It's a very compelling and yet soothing piece. The words flow so naturally, I can almost see them tiptoeing in water. You have a way to make words feel so alive.

Keep Writing. ^__^

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. I could feel my spirit feeling stronger from reading your hopeful words.
"lines unto your feet
enlightening your mind,soul
and heart, take the gift"
A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[emmajoy]

Beautiful flowing words, as they're meant to, subtle and gentle .. 'in deep whirling waves, sea winds ~ blow mist clouded tears '

A poem within a poem, romance, the sea .. a marriage of feelings.

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sigh romantic metaphors wrapped in liquid love...lovely

[Goodbye]

I could feel the wonderful, haling flow of the water reading this - such incredible imagery and tone!