`PeAchy KeeN`

 

 
Yeah, had all my necessities,
my rose-colored shades and
psychedelic towel.
Jumped into my cool corvette car
and sped to the beach in style.
 
Cranked my music 
way high, to a jumpin' jazzy tune.
Splashed satiny sun lotion on myself
oh yeah, it was a beachy keen day in June

Next thing I knew
sand was kicked up in my face.
A big old dog and a flying frisbee
had been into a race.
 
'Come here Spot!' I heard his master shout
and as this guy drew near I looked into his eyes
He was the one, I knew without a doubt
It was love at first sight, beneath azure skies

Now that beachy keen day,was a few years ago
but the happiness still holds true today
and if you catch me smiling you'll know
It's because I still enjoy that peachy keen love in everyway 
 

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

Oh friend what loveliness
He was the one ,i had no doubts.love at first sight,beneath azure skies
That beachy keen day a few years ago,but happiness still holds on today
and i still enjoy the peachy keen day in every way
Oh love under azure skies,came un noticed ,still so much welcome
lovely write..

[An owl on the moon]

What a joyful story of love, played like a song there on the beach! Your words flowed so well, giving us glimpses of the day, and stirring that sense of life and all else that makes a perfect write. Wonderful!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem.

[Serend1p1ty]

What a happy poem, you can feel the energy this poem has.
It's great to read a happy, warm feeling poem.
Great write, no faults here for me to talk of, expertly written.

Yours truly,
cloud6

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Filled with happiness
The first two stanzas portrays how you are ready for a sweet day out on a sunny beach, and we feel how lovely you perceive life .. you've made the piece scene stronger by adding up some music
What's more interesting than adding love into that day? and that's what you did, with the man's entrance into the scene: 'love at first sight'
This day promises to have a wonderful end, and i guess it would be the woman (you) and the man hands in hands on the beach, your head on his shoulders, watching the sunset, as the dog plays in front of them ..
Nice poem ..
Loved it