`PeAchy KeeN`

 

 
Yeah, had all my necessities,
my rose-colored shades and
psychedelic towel.
Jumped into my cool corvette car
and sped to the beach in style.
 
Cranked my music 
way high, to a jumpin' jazzy tune.
Splashed satiny sun lotion on myself
oh yeah, it was a beachy keen day in June

Next thing I knew
sand was kicked up in my face.
A big old dog and a flying frisbee
had been into a race.
 
'Come here Spot!' I heard his master shout
and as this guy drew near I looked into his eyes
He was the one, I knew without a doubt
It was love at first sight, beneath azure skies

Now that beachy keen day,was a few years ago
but the happiness still holds true today
and if you catch me smiling you'll know
It's because I still enjoy that peachy keen love in everyway 
 

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

Oh friend what loveliness
He was the one ,i had no doubts.love at first sight,beneath azure skies
That beachy keen day a few years ago,but happiness still holds on today
and i still enjoy the peachy keen day in every way
Oh love under azure skies,came un noticed ,still so much welcome
lovely write..

[Ishwar Grewal]

loved the way you have written it.....i could feel myself being in there by the beach and have a view of what happened.... thats what an amazing writer can do .... to make others live in a imagination that you create..... beautifulll...... loved it... :)

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Ishwar so vey much..I try to do just that..so glad you enjoyed my poem. ..Thanks also for the award.. I so appreciate it;

[Zayir]

Such love and happiness that is beautifully transcribed

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Awww gorgeous love the way you write

[Sean M. Addams]

love the imagery in this overall i thought it was a very beautiful piece

[Jibey]

A charming poem, with the fragrance and juicy taste of a peach.

[Fran Marie]

Many thanks for reding and reviewing..

[Wicahpi]

Sounds like a good day at the beach. Thank you for sharing.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks ..so very much appriciated..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

reminds me of the Doris Troy song..."just one look, that 's all it took, yeah, just one look"

love the story ....heartwarming...so nice to read positive...seems as poets it is hard for us to write happy...but you did it so well here.

j.

[Fran Marie]

Yes, I remember That song..thanks, Jacob, so vey much ..I appriciate It;

[barleygirl]

What a great story in verse! Loved it! Very relatable, too! Many timely remembrances to send us back to the times: "peachy keen" & "beachy keen" (loved these two phrases juxtaposed!) I could almost see & feel the disruption of the dog & Frisbee (surprising way to bring in the hero of the tale!) Very playful way to share the meeting with groovy vibes that last a lifetime! *smile*

[Fran Marie]

Many thanks, BarelyG., for the kind thoughts on my poem.I appriciate..;

[Rory CJ Frankson]

Congradulations on this award winning delightful piece, Fran.
I've always been a beach bum and lived on lakes, love beaches...
just never owned, a Corvette.
That'd be poetry, if it was a 61 split window 427, 4 speed Stingray.... ya man!
Awsome work, Romon... hmm, maybe feel a poem comin on... thanx. ;)

[Marie Harrison]

Now that's the kind of beach towel poem I was looking for! I wish that would happen to me at the beach Fran! Great poem.