Trance

 

A trance that's what it was alright                 I remember it well, it was November.   that night you asked me                  to your cabin in the mountain. you hypnotized me with                   sweet soft words, then your undivided attention and kisses               as we lie entwined in a lover's embrace, on the bear skin rug yes,by a glowing amber fireplace                all snugly warm as the night winds howled outside the window, and snow                 silently drifted thru~ the chilled night air. I was mesmerized as you reached                 for me so completely and melted under your touch so soothing,I held the moment                 as you turned it into a blissful night of love best of all you wanted me there to stay                  but I had to go at dawn~ and so I did driving home in a trance                              but darlin' I'll be back!

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

It is indeed hard not to read this as if in a trance, the flow and the feel of the words pulling us along on this romantic tale. There remains a casual feel to the polished form presented, that does not let it slip off beyond our reach but rather keeps us within that tempting embrace of a daydream that forms with each new line.

[Astrid Hamilton]

This is so sensually romantic, as if written on a whim in a trance, not on paper,
said in an ear, a whisper.
This poem feels like a story of two lovers, caught in words for sonnet-sing,
the cabin in the mountains, the pictures that you paint, that look of trance (on her face)
is enlightening, melodic, soft, to the soul; the kisses so passionate, the moment so perfect,
two melding as one, and the vivid images you create make it seem as if it were real.
Great job!